In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In psychology it is famous said that positive reinforcement results in more positive action. Irrespective of the field, when an individual come across previous achievements and success automatically get motivated to produce more success in that field. I strongly support this notion and the reasons are stated below .
Several times it has been seen that past achievements and records act as a catalyser for future success. First of all, in the field of medical sciences day in and day out many researches are getting conducted . Successful implementation of one study on patients encourage clinicians to plan and carry out further researches in that area. Thus, it helps in both individual and professional growth. For an example, at past when no investigations were available to see internal structures of the body to diagnose various diseases, Rhoentgen’s invention of X-ray machine to visualise bone, lungs made a significant contribution in medical sciences and after that researchers have developed Magnetic resonance imaging, Functional magnetic resonance imaging and many more to see minutely different tissues of our body. Secondly, the same applies in the field of sports as well. Before 1983 Indians were least interested in watching and playing cricket. However, after the winning of first cricket world cup many cricketers like Sachin Tendulkar and Sourav Ganguly were motivated to play for the nation and they have changed the cricket sport scenario in India. That past achievement not only helped India to create more better cricketer but also made India to lift the second world cup. Moreover, country’s economical growth is getting increased by virtue of cricket.
Additionally, in the field of technology, business, start up, marketing everywhere we can see how the previous success and performance is motivating to execute more and therefore helping the individual to flourish.
To conclude, in my opinion individual and in any professional field, success is completely dependent on past achievement and that further leads to more achievements which move on a cyclic manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 326.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46319018405 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06488278232 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60736196319 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.7704866622 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.733333333 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133826392511 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436642763424 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479490761192 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0951501373097 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513874135727 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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