Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Several questions need to be asked and answered for evaluating the recommendation and argument.
It is stated that the school has the most intensive program. While an intensive program can make students become more effective and hardworking but they should be allowed a certain freedom of choice and expression. Are the students overworked to a considerable extent? In case of being overworked, the students might become good dancers but might grow out of love with dancing. We need to know that the working hours of the program and commensurate with what the students can adequately manage and retain their passion and enthusiasm.
There are a couple of ambiguities in the argument regarding the teachers and students of the school, that have done well. It has been mentioned that many students have been recruited by top dance companies, but we are not told the ratio of such students with respect to the total number of students. The word "many" can mean anything - it can be ten students or it can be a thousand students but we need to know what proportion of students are hired by the top companies in order to make sense of this argument. Similar thing can be stated for the "teachers" who have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies. We are not told how many such teachers are employed by the school. Another ambiguity in case of teachers is we are not told about the work performance of the teachers in these companies and the years that they spent in the company. This will help us determine the credibility of the teachers properly. Also, are these passionate about teaching the students? As a passionate teacher is able to spread his zeal to the students, who are able to develop a greater appreciation for the subject.
While some of the students were hired by top dance companies, what happens with other students? Are they able to find an adequate job? The answer to these questions will explain whether the school pays an equitable amount of attention to all students and the safe chances that the student, if not getting the top company, will be able to find a decent job for himself. This is a more germane measure to evaluate the success of the school rather than a few students, who are recruited by top companies.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1817 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.554 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.143 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.186 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'certain freedom'.
Suggestion: certain freedom
... hardworking but they should be allowed a certain freedom of choice and expression. Are the stude...
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Line 7, column 7, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... appreciation for the subject. While some of the students were hired by top dance compan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, thus, well, while, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83804627249 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81005052587 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467866323907 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6332014768 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0526315789 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237682403147 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800248444675 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689513913794 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122033422171 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069633573605 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.