Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
It is stated that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child in Elmtown as it has the most intensive program.As well as, their teachers have worked with various ballet companies all over the world and their students have become professional dancers with top dance companies.However,before evaluating the argument ,some questions need to be answered whether the recommendation is valid or not .
Firstly,do the child of Elmtown really wanna be a ballet dancer?Just because Pirouettes Ballet School has intensive program,can it really motivate a child to become dancer if she or he does not want to?Perhaps,the child wants to become an actor and wants to work with Broadway in near future.Perhaps he is fond of music or other activities.Perhaps he wants to perform his own concert one day.So just because it has intensive programs,does not mean it will be a clear choice for a child.Rather he should do what makes him happy or he really wants.If either of these true,the argument will be surely weakened.
Furthermore,do the students,who have become professional dancers with top dance company,are they really successful? Perhaps,the dance company were in shortage of dancers.They might badly in need of dancers for an upcoming important event.Perhaps,the students which have been hired from Pirouettes Ballet school,working as optional dancers.Just because ,the companies hired the students does not mean they are capable and expert at ballet dance.If any of these become true,the argument can not hold the water and surely wear out.
Moreover,do the teachers of Pirouettes are really professional and can handle students in real sense? Perhaps,They have danced in the most prestigious companies across the global world ,but what is their qualification ?Are they capable to teach a small child properly, who is so enthusiasts about dance?Perhaps,they might be good dancer but they dont know how to teach someone.Perhaps,they might not hold any professional degree to be a ballet teacher.If these things become true ,the argument will be significantly undermined at a great
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1712 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.479 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 51.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.033 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.491 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.748 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.186 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, thus, well, in short, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 327.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45565749235 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.44789846028 2.78398813304 124% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519877675841 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 22.8473053892 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.605494288 57.8364921388 314% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 297.333333333 119.503703932 249% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.5 23.324526521 234% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.8333333333 5.70786347227 295% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 43.0 5.25449101796 818% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330736218373 0.218282227539 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182159233721 0.0743258471296 245% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129364219677 0.0701772020484 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238332702145 0.128457276422 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131231959129 0.0628817314937 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.5 14.3799401198 219% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 16.67 48.3550499002 34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 12.197005988 200% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.28 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.32208582834 116% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 11.1389221557 212% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 11.9071856287 202% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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