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Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

“Education is the powerful weapon which you can use to change the world”-Nelson Mandela

From the ancient time education is playing a significant role in day to day lives. Infact, education has eradicated the dark side of a society and preaches the light of hope to the people.The prompt recommends that some people think that education makes the mind and spirit free whereas others think that education which is learnt formally, constrain our minds rather than setting them free.In my opinion,I mostly agree that “formal” education can restrain the mind rather them set them free for three reasons.

Firstly , formal education starts from our childhood. Sometimes over serious parents insist their little children to study at an early age so that in future they can be an “Educated” citizen of the prospect country. As a result at a little age the child thinks it ,as a bound duty without finding the core essence of education. In history we see numerous examples that people who does not get formal education also shine in their life.For example the famous poet Rabindronath Tagore did not have any formal degree,yet he was the first poet who achieved Nobel Prize in Bangla literature .It is because ,he did not make himself bound to the limit of education rather he set his mind free with the help of nature ,circumstances and environment .So formal education can never be a path to free our mind rather it limits our spirit.

Furthermore ,does really formal education makes a man educated in real sense?In our society there are many people who obviously is literate with the standard of society, but have a very shallow mind .If a man do not help other people when anybody seeks for it ,become begrudge to the people who does better than him and to them life is a complete race,will formal education really sets their mind free? .They do not try to learn becoming a better human being ,rather formal education make them a puppet who will earn money in near future .

Moreover ,Formal education only give us knowledge through books .It does not have any empirical effect.A man should learn from all the aspects .To be genuinely a good man he should learn from the society , from the environment and from other people .Without mixing other people we never know the other persons perspectives, his thoughts and without putting ourselves in their shoes we really cant judge a people .And it will surely restrict our mind. Education does not mean it just have to be learnt in an institution for a purpose rather it should for becoming a better human being with a creative and universal mindset .

However ,formal education does not only have demerits but also some benefits too. It shows us a path and a guideline to educate ourselves. Formal education builds the basic foundation of a human nature and other prospects of society just strengthen it . But surely only stick to formal education a person will limit his or her mind rather then flying with wings up above the sky.

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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2518.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92759295499 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68555917478 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 153.430051203 60.3974514979 254% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 179.857142857 118.986275619 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.5 23.4991977007 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 5.21951772744 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 44.0 7.80617977528 564% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371599582967 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130000658175 0.0831039109588 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103622312962 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209552046147 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980379280123 0.0667264976115 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 14.1392134831 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.8420337079 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 11.8971910112 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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