Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The prompt is evaluating the safety of this species of shrimps, the Madagascan shrimp. This gives a plausible explanation for the observed decline in the species population as the excess activities of fishermen. However, more evidence has to be provided to support this claim. This response discusses some of the evidence that must be provided before accepting that Madagascan shrimps are soon going to be extinct because of excessive fishing activities.
First, there should be a result of a detailed empirical study that demonstrates the observed steady decline in the population of these shrimps; the result should date back to 50 years prior. This evidence would evaluate the claim of their impending extinction. The result would be juxtaposed against established extinction trends of similar extinct species. The inability to establish a clear correlation between both trends invalidates the claim of their imminent extinction. In addition, the current population level of the shrimps would be determined and compared to the previous level obtained after the last breeding season to ascertain that there is a constant decline post-breeding seasons.
Secondly, there should be evidence of the amount of shrimps harvested annually by fishermen, this would be compared with the current population levels to determine the percentage of shrimps that are harvested yearly and the impact on the population level. if the proportions greater than a universally defined percentage (perhaps 80%), it can be concluded fishing is deleterious consequences on the population of shrimps. This strengthens the argument to an extent.
There should also be evidence that shows that there is no other factor responsible for the decline in the shrimp population. Other factors may include, climate change, ocean pollution, activities of predators and migration of the species. The inability to rule out these factors invalidates the assumption that only fishing activity is responsible for the decline in population. And ultimately renders the argument illogical and gratuitous.
In conclusion, while the argument seeks to establish a direct correlation between fishing activities and extinction of the Madagascan Shrimp, there are evidences that must be provided. These evidences should prove that fishing is the only factor responsible for the decline in the shrimp population; that the percentage of shrimps harvested manually is sufficient to predict the extinction of the species; that the trend from previous years predicts a possibility of extinction of the species. Inability to prove these weakens the argument and renders the argument and conlusion unacceptable.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 2213 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.491 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.912 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.334 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...and the impact on the population level. if the proportions greater than a universa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61786600496 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98394705928 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446650124069 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4223481659 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.157894737 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2105263158 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150551011108 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493026159663 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551389415986 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940479906404 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034260886995 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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