A recent sales study indicated that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent over the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants that specialize in seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about eating healthily. Therefore, a new Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood will be quite popular and profitable.
The context says that the consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased and hence a new Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood will be quite popular and profitable.It is completely assuming that as the consumption increased , opening a new restaurant specializing in seafood will be profitable.The statement ignores the facts such as probability of new competetors,changes in peoples interest.
Firstly, the fact is supported by the scenario that there are currently no other restaurants specialized in sea food. For example if there is a new competitor coming and they also serves high quality and good sea food cuisines then there are chances that people going to that restaurant as well. Only based on the fact that the sea food consumption increased we cannot confirm that opening the new restaurant will be profitable. The quality of food and chances of other healthier options which people will consider in the future also has to be taken into account.
Secondly it is said that people are opting for healthier options nowadays which need not be always the option of sea food.Also there could be changes in financial conditions in the future which is completely ignored. Eating less home cooked food doesn’t ensure that people will always go for sea food and assume that the business will be popular and profitable.
Finally it cannot be confirmed that opening a new restaurant will be popular and profitable without any studies involving risks in the future and the challenges .The increase consumption of seafood alone cannot be used as a supporting fact for the profit of the restaurant. Instead a detailed study on peoples interest and quality of food served, challenges from competitors has to be done. Hence we cannot agree with conclusion that a new restaurant will ensure a popular and profitable business.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1524 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.746 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.235 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.661 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...od will be quite popular and profitable.It is completely assuming that as the cons...
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Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...suming that as the consumption increased , opening a new restaurant specializing i...
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Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...cializing in seafood will be profitable.The statement ignores the facts such as pro...
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Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , changes
...s such as probability of new competetors,changes in peoples interest. Firstly, the fa...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'serve'
Suggestion: serve
...s a new competitor coming and they also serves high quality and good sea food cuisines...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...ed not be always the option of sea food.Also there could be changes in financial con...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ed not be always the option of sea food.Also there could be changes in financial con...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ness will be popular and profitable. Finally it cannot be confirmed that opening a n...
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Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...g risks in the future and the challenges .The increase consumption of seafood alon...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...risks in the future and the challenges .The increase consumption of seafood alone c...
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Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... fact for the profit of the restaurant. Instead a detailed study on peoples interest an...
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Line 7, column 392, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...lenges from competitors has to be done. Hence we cannot agree with conclusion that a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, as to, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17940199336 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95156469258 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461794019934 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.0237066559 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.9 119.503703932 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1 23.324526521 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3 5.70786347227 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179862176654 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794069985897 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949802861017 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132054633037 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118206861016 0.0628817314937 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.3799401198 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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