A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they "frequently" had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt "sad, down or blue" at least three times within the past month. These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author in the topic draw a conclusion based on a survey on 250 adults, that was as long as adults spending time in online they felt more depression. The argument is based on unwarranted assumptions and flawed for the following reasons.
First of all, the author draw that conclusion based on a survey conducted only on 250 adults. There is no way that a handful number of people actually represents the whole population of adults. Besides the author does not provide any information about how did he conducted the survey, was it worldwide or in a certain locality. It might be possible that in particular area, people subjected to some negative websites or expressions that cause depression. It also might have been possible that because the adults felt despodent they tend to social websites and they contact to more lonely peoples and that cause more depression.
The second argument the author represented was, that the adults who spent equals to or more than 30 hours on internnet feel sad or down. Although the the author does not provide any concrete data that proves the truth of the claim. The author does not provide any information about the range of age of the adults who were faces depression. It might be possible that the adults who feel depression may be over 70 years, they have nothing to do so they felt down, not because of the internet but because of the lifestyles.
Another claim the author presented was based on the survey that, the time spent on online should be limited for health lifestyle. But it might be possible that peoples actually dependent on internet they might earn from online job and some people might attainted online classes, so based on a survey on limited people it would be unfeasible to conclude that limiting time on online will improve the lifestyle. It might have been possible that the author delibrately choose the depressed adults to conducts his survey and they were despodent on their overall lifestyle not because of the times spent on online. Also there is no inforfation about people were not depressed before used internet, they situations might alleviate after spending time on social media or on internet.
The argument is flawed for the above reasons and also based on the unwarranted assumptions. Also, the author failed to provide any convincing data that proves that fetter the online time will improve the peoples' mood and the situations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 409 350
No. of Characters: 1966 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.497 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.807 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.458 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.292 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.376 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...clusion based on a survey on 250 adults, that was as long as adults spending tim...
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...sed on a survey on 250 adults, that was as long as adults spending time in onlin...
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...ct to more lonely peoples and that cause more depression. The second argument th...
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...30 hours on internnet feel sad or down. Although the the author does not provide any con...
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...t because of the times spent on online. Also there is no inforfation about people we...
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...fetter the online time will improve the peoples mood and the situations.
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...ve the peoples mood and the situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, in particular, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89975550122 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52839163717 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41564792176 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0001441751 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.882352941 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15787649783 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590165025604 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564765073005 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997625659324 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525372433618 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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