SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The move from SuperCorp of its headquarters to Corporateville is not supported by the argument given which depends on the flawed assertions that Corporateville is superior, employees prefer to live in a non-urban area, and that Corporratevillei s safer than Middlesburg. The argument that SuperCorp moving its headquarters to CorporateVille is flawed with a myriad of issues, including flawed reasoning in increasing homeowners equating to a superior place, an employee survey that could have a questionable methodology, and lower taxes link to a safer place to work or a cheaper place to work.
The reasoning that a recent surge in homeowners makes CorporateVille superior to Middlesburg is flawed because it is based upon the assumption that more people buying a home at CorporateVille makes it a better place to live when there are other reasons that the number of homeowners is increasing. There could be a slump in real estate prices at CorporateVille increasing the demand for these houses. With an increased demand for houses at CorporateVille then it is natural that there would be an increase in homeowners. Another possiblity is Corporateville is a relatively new place to live compared to Middlesburg, so the amount of people looking to buy a home is high in Corporateville meaning that there would be a natural surge of homeowners as the market builds more homes to meet demand.
An employee survey showing that workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban could have a very flawed methodology. How was the question about living area phrased in the survey when it was given? It is possible that the question asked if workers if they preferred to live in a cheaper, rural area as opposed to an expensive, urban area, which may or may not be the case with Corporateville and Middlesburg. With additional adjectives put into the question to describe the choices the question would become flawed because it would influence the employee filling out the survey. The survey question could also give the employee a limited number of choices that do not represent the entire spectrum of choices. Did the survey ask employees specific names of urban areas or did it ask in general if they preferred an urban area? There are many ways that the survey given to employees by SuperCorp could be flawed and skew the results of the survey to give the false impression of workers preferring to work in non-urban areas.
Finally, linking CorporateVille taxes being lower than Middlesburg to an increase in safety does not make sense. There is no reasoning given for how a lower tax rate would increase the safety of a community. It would be easier to make the argument that an increase in taxes could help increase safety if that money was used to increase police presence and other measures to increase safety, however, the argument here appears to be the opposite. The argument also states that lower taxes make an area cheaper to work, but that statement relies on everything between Corporateville and Middlesburg to remain equal except tax rates. It is highly unlikely that these two communities are the exact same except for taxes. It is very possible that Corproateville has higher costs for items purchased from a local store, so the employees moving to Corporateville would have a higher cost of living than they previously did at Middlesburg, making Corporateville not a cheaper place to work than Middlesburg.
The argument that SuperCorp made the best decision in moving its headquarters to Corporateville is flawed because the argument relies on faulty logic in a surge of homeowners in Corporateville making it a superior place to live than Middlesburg, a potentially flawed survey, and linking lower taxes to a safer place to work and a cheaper place to work.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 630 350
No. of Characters: 3105 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.01 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.929 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.978 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 215 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 117 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to work or a cheaper place to work. The reasoning that a recent surge in homeow...
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Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: IF_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ible that the question asked if workers if they preferred to live in a cheaper, ru...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, may, so, then, except for, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 55.5748502994 155% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3158.0 2260.96107784 140% => OK
No of words: 630.0 441.139720559 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0126984127 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00997013923 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03102958376 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.371428571429 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1026.0 705.55239521 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.2709798231 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.9 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288936897297 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996618033118 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109299080837 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214783469916 0.128457276422 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110129707201 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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