SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The following argument is flawed in numerous reasons. Primarily for not being thorough with their assumptions and also for not taking the important factors in account which would challenge the assumptions made by the supercorp
To start with, Super crop has not taken the infrastructure expenditure for shifting their headquarters from Middlesburg to Corporateville. For a company as big as supercorp, it will cost them time and resources to make the shift which could affect their day to day work resulting with their clients being unhappy. Also to add that most of their clients are based out of Middlesburg, it will be difficult for them to adapt the change.
About the survey mentioned in their argument, it is an inefficient assumption by SuperCrop. Even though they claim to say that most of their employees prefer Urban cities. They have failed to produce the extent of the survey. None of the specifics of the surveys were mentioned. How many percentage of their employees took the survey? In which how many were male and how many were female? Which age group people took the survey ? There are so many unanswered question without which this assumption cannot be validated.
While comparing the taxes between Middlesburg and Corporateville, SuperCrop has prematurely came to a conclusion that CorporateVille will be a cheaper place to live. They have failed to take the cost of living into account. While usually people assume that cost of living suburbs is cheaper than urban cities, Middelesburg has the highest cost of living in the entire country. Due to the state’s ease on taxes, there’s lots of demand for properties which increases their cost living.
Because the argument makes unwarranted assumption, It hardly makes a convincing case that SuperCrop did a good decision by shifting their Headquarters from Middlesburg to Corporateville.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 2019 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.164 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.985 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.033 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.391 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 226, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge the assumptions made by the supercorp To start with, Super crop has not taken ...
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Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...lting with their clients being unhappy. Also to add that most of their clients are b...
^^^^
Line 6, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...an inefficient assumption by SuperCrop. Even though they claim to say that most of their em...
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Line 6, column 284, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun percentage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many percentages'.
Suggestion: many percentages
...fics of the surveys were mentioned. How many percentage of their employees took the survey? In ...
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Line 8, column 93, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...rporateville, SuperCrop has prematurely came to a conclusion that CorporateVille wil...
^^^^
Line 8, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ccount. While usually people assume that cost of living suburbs is cheaper than u...
^^
Line 10, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ers from Middlesburg to Corporateville.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33503836317 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11939626684 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514066496164 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.6730799257 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7727272727 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13636363636 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289240045628 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931943930909 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.182661492723 0.0701772020484 260% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148582791909 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.209667249203 0.0628817314937 333% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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