In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The article argues that the city government should devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities. But some questions need to be answered to enhance the convincing of the statement.
First, the author claims that in surveys Mason City residents rank water sports among their favorite recreational activities. However, we need to know the conductor of this survey. If the survey is investigated by a group of college students who only cope with the assignment of the class, the result of the survey may not be reliable; but if the survey truly finished by a professional team or a member of the government who majors in collecting data, the circumstance of the survey is suitable for the government to refer.
Moreover, the article also states that the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For this statement, we prefer knowing the actual number of the budget of maintaining facilities to abstract comparison such as little of its budget. In addition, giving the whole budget of the city park department is also a helpful way for us to realize whether the city park department really concerns with these recreational facilities.
Last but not least, the article proclaims that after the park department cleans up Mason River, use of the river for water sports increases. The relation between two things should be thought carefully. Indeed, many people tend to play and use the clean river so that the statement seems reasonable at first glance. But maybe there are some other factors that cause many people to use Mason River. For example, if there is a river near Mason River, which used to be a famous river for water sport, facing terrible pollution or some construction such as bridges on the river, those water sports players are forced to find another river to play. Thus, they find that Mason River is a good place to play. It fortunately meets the cleaning up of Mason River so that people will misunderstand that the cleaning up has a relation to the increasing participant. Therefore, it should find more exhaustive investigation to assure that both things have a direct relation.
The conclusion is that the author may give more detail to make the statement more convincing.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: The article argues that the city government should devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Description: A noun, singular, proper is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to riverside and recreational
Sentence: First, the author claims that in surveys Mason City residents rank water sports among their favorite recreational activities.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, proper
Suggestion: Refer to surveys and Mason
Sentence: If the survey is investigated by a group of college students who only cope with the assignment of the class, the result of the survey may not be reliable; but if the survey truly finished by a professional team or a member of the government who majors in collecting data, the circumstance of the survey is suitable for the government to refer.
Description: A WH-pronoun, nominative is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to who and majors
Sentence: Moreover, the article also states that the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities.
Description: The word states is not usually used as a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to states
Sentence: For this statement, we prefer knowing the actual number of the budget of maintaining facilities to abstract comparison such as little of its budget.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to comparison and such
Sentence: Last but not least, the article proclaims that after the park department cleans up Mason River, use of the river for water sports increases.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to sports and increases
Sentence: But maybe there are some other factors that cause many people to use Mason River.
Description: The fragment that cause many is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace cause with verb, past tense
Sentence: For example, if there is a river near Mason River, which used to be a famous river for water sport, facing terrible pollution or some construction such as bridges on the river, those water sports players are forced to find another river to play.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to construction and such
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to sports and players
Sentence: If the survey is investigated by a group of college students who only cope with the assignment of the class, the result of the survey may not be reliable; but if the survey truly finished by a professional team or a member of the government who majors in collecting data, the circumstance of the survey is suitable for the government to refer.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The conclusion is that the author may give more detail to make the statement more convincing.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
Read a good grammar book.
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Minimum four paragraphs wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1861 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.86 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.882 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.321 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... government should devote more money in this years budget to riverside recreational ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01846965699 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76664898392 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501319261214 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1318284892 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.882352941 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371996392637 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11138797014 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115072142617 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155155902186 0.128457276422 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931194080521 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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