While it may be true that the city authorities should invest in the riverside leisure facilities, the author’s argument does make a cogent case for the reason why it benefits to citizens.
We should acknowledge that the writer mentions about the survey, but he/she does not provide the data regards to water activity demand of the citizens. The author shows that the river is seldom used for outside activities along with the responsible department lacks of caring about the riverside facilities. However, it is not relevant to why the government should give the money for embellishing the river surrounding. More importantly, the message notice the available infrastructures in both sides of the river; however, it does not provide the performance of them is good or bad.
When the argument comes to the quality of water, the odor can reduce the aggregation of inhabitants around the river. In other words, the dweller scare that the smell and quality of the river will affect their health as well as the river status is not suitable for water sports. However, there are not clearly evident that the usage of the river will increase when the government devote the budget to improve and equip both sides of the river.
Beside that, the writer does not explain precisely why does the city ought to give the money in this year. For simple term, she/he writes that the state has recently confirmed plan to improve the river quality, but it does not recognize when it will be started as well as when it will be finished. Therefore, it gives a question: “Should the authorities give a budget in this year?”.
In the light of these facts, the author should provide more convincing information to persuade the people from the power, such as provide more relative data about the demand of riverside activities in the survey or the benefits if the city devotes to the riverside facility.
- As humans rely more on technology the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 58
- College students should base their choice of field of study on the availability of jobs in that field 50
- Governments should place few if any restrictions on scientific research and development 50
- In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports swimming boating and fishing among their favorite recreational activities The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits however and the city park department devotes little of i 55
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1522 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.727 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.355 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.406 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 320.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.903125 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58858484203 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4875 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3094863637 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.75 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163263616514 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615558293329 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331527772798 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913976632403 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241683945461 0.0628817314937 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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