We should acknowledge that the modern engineering will worsen the dwellers brain if they rely on and only use it for the simple tasks. First of all, inhabitants merely apply the technology for leisures or the works that do not require more thinking. A typical example for this case is that if using the computer is limited in a range of playing games, listening to music, watching videos on Youtube or creating a basic document, then people do not need to use more intellectual. Therefore, using technology for the simple jobs will decline the thinking ability of humans.
Having said that, however, the majority of the jobs in the society are the complicated jobs. Hence, it means that the technology requires people to think more and enhance their ability to solve the problems. First and foremost, the engineering requires people to learn to use it. In simple terms, to use the devices for the daily activity, learning to use it in the right way to maximize the lifetime and efficiency and safety for the user is very critical. Apart from it, the advancement of technology also creates new issues. With the new issues, workers have to use their knowledge, experience and skills to solve problems and then improve in order to eliminate them. More importantly, there are more complicated tasks when using the technology. For instance, using the computer for acquiring the data. The employee needs to learn the tools and softwares regarding the analysing and processing data. Although the tools and software can support synthesizing the data, but to get the valuable information, people have to choose and filter the right data. Furthermore, they also analyze the data to get the precise message. Thus, the technology requires people to think and learn more.
- In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports swimming boating and fishing among their favorite recreational activities The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits however and the city park department devotes little of i 55
- Governments should place few if any restrictions on scientific research and development 50
- College students should base their choice of field of study on the availability of jobs in that field 50
- As humans rely more on technology the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the engineering requires people to learn to use it. In simple terms, to use the d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, apart from, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9792746114 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77081955478 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.163732272 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30221667711 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914914891496 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868540718333 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205739945924 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470121406395 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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