According to the planning department of the city of transopolis, as they have adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway, and it has revitalized the city, and now they are planning to do the same in the opposite side of the city as it has been observed in a declining residential area. In my opinion the argument is resting on questionable assumptions, suffers from vaguely defined terms and contains numerous logical fallacy that is making the argument weak.
At the very outset, the author is correlating the city of transopolis one side area to the opposite side, but did not provide any sufficient evidence which can validate that the correlation is solid. For instance, it may by the case that the geographic location of the both area is far different, so what has played out on the previous location may not be valid in other area. On the other hand, the author mentioned the area that they had acted the urban renewal plan is consist of freeway, so it can be inferred that the location where the urban renewal plan is executed had a very well-structured roads, which may attracted people to migrate on that area in contrast maybe other side of the city does no consists of this facility. So the comparison does not hold water.
Secondly, the author has mentioned about the crime rate which seems vague. Here the author is assuming that the reason of crime rate has decreased because of the factories that is established there, but the author has failed to draw any correlation with that. It may happen that the crime rate has declined for some other reason. The author did not provide any further evidence that the crime rate has decreased because of the urban renewal program which is weakening the argument. On the other hand the author is comparing a decade with the present, it may happen now on the opposite side the crime rate is already declined, and no need to think of that.
Thirdly, the author has mentioned about decline of the resident, and mentioned that some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, It may happen that people are leaving the area for other reason, may they do not have proper communication method, in contrast previously mentioned area has a freeway, so maybe because of this reason people are moving and maybe the urban renewal program will not make it revive which is a flaw in this argument.
Fourthly, in the recommendation it is mentioned that the people who are living now In that area, and will be displaced by adaptation of industrial use will be relocate, but why would the people will move as some of the people will want to stay in their ancestor place and it may happen that they will go for protest. Author did not provide any further evidence about this.
In conclusion, the recommendation from the planning department of the city possess may flaws which is weakening the argument, in order to solidify author claim, the author need to provide the evidence that the area can be comparable, and a decade does not change anything yet. Otherwise the author evidence is totally depending upon assumptions and posits unwarranted.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 545 350
No. of Characters: 2570 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.832 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.716 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.259 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.647 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lacy that is making the argument weak. At the very outset, the author is correl...
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Line 2, column 604, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'road'?
Suggestion: road
... is executed had a very well-structured roads, which may attracted people to migrate ...
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Line 2, column 711, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consist'?
Suggestion: consist
...st maybe other side of the city does no consists of this facility. So the comparison doe...
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Line 2, column 711, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consist'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: consist
...st maybe other side of the city does no consists of this facility. So the comparison doe...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...So the comparison does not hold water. Secondly, the author has mentioned about...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eclined, and no need to think of that. Thirdly, the author has mentioned about ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vive which is a flaw in this argument. Fourthly, in the recommendation it is me...
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Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
..., but why would the people will move as some of the people will want to stay in their ances...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ovide any further evidence about this. In conclusion, the recommendation from t...
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Line 6, column 281, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
... a decade does not change anything yet. Otherwise the author evidence is totally dependin...
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Line 6, column 311, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...hing yet. Otherwise the author evidence is totally depending upon assumptions and posits unwarranted...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 545.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81834862385 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65039123321 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.394495412844 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.67365269461 538% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.543700346 57.8364921388 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.125 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0625 23.324526521 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234793305883 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773203877323 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740291864928 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1235995694 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643746126686 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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