From the Deans newsletter it is mentioned that The university of Wabash is considering a community service requirement and espoused that it will ba a good oppertunity to give back to the society however, In my opinion the argument rests on many logical fallacies, which can greatly undermine the authors claim and prove the argument unwarrented.
At the very outset, the author is claiming that if the student will do the community service project it may help them to become a well rounded and charitable members of the society but there is no evidence provided that it is the case, as it may happen that the student will do that from the pressure and may not become charitable in future as that is the requirement of completion of the degree so they are just doing it.
Secondly, The author has claim that doing community project may help them to gain real world experience, but what is the proof that they will actually get some real world experience? It may happen that the student who is doing the community project is from the physice background and doing the community project he may only get the people skills but the physics is the subject which require enormous mathematical study so if that student is doing the comunity project he may be just waste his time, and it may happen that the time he will put in the community project may have could put on his research and can have some ground breaking discovery.
Thirdly, it is being mentioned that the comunity project is of 8 hours and it will be for the 9 months and unpaid, which may feel like a tough thing to do for most of the students, as if we see the scenerio of America, most the students has to pay for there tuition fees and if the are working somewhere which is unpaid that may result problematic, as the students whose are in undergrad and grad school probably many of the student even pays their own rent, and if it is being imposed on the student then it may happen that many of the student may not get the benifit by it.
There is no doubt that community projects are great thing, it may increase students people skills, and students may learn many things for it. However if a student is devoting his 9 month on something that is not paying him anything then it may bring some problems, and if the author may decress the time limit that may help the argument to bolster otherwise the argument seem unwarrented and the author claim is based on the unreasonable assumptions.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 1979 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.477 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.417 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.68 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.502 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.801 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.307 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m and prove the argument unwarrented. At the very outset, the author is claimi...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... the degree so they are just doing it. Secondly, The author has claim that doin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have some ground breaking discovery. Thirdly, it is being mentioned that the ...
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Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...as to pay for there tuition fees and if the are working somewhere which is unpaid that ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...student may not get the benifit by it. There is no doubt that community project...
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Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... students may learn many things for it. However if a student is devoting his 9 month on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as to, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.9520958084 208% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5520361991 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47709765172 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418552036199 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 63.0 22.8473053892 276% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 142.665871954 57.8364921388 247% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 287.428571429 119.503703932 241% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.1428571429 23.324526521 271% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.1428571429 5.70786347227 283% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150300694816 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830042404063 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554059554893 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103295424495 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480361902002 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.6 14.3799401198 220% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 24.45 48.3550499002 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 12.197005988 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.0 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.2 11.1389221557 244% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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