Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument given by the author states that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, interview-centered is a better method compare to the observation-centered. To strength his argument, the author provided the evidence that children in the island talking more about their biological parents than the other adults in the village. This argument looks convincing at first glance, but several groundless assumptions make it invalid.
First of all, it is too presumptuous to conclude that Dr. Field’s observation-centered method is bias because there is a twenty years’ bl...
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the assumption that children spent more time talking about their biological parents equals to the conclusion that they are taken care by their parents is feeble
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence? You have this issue in other essays too.
prove some more detail to strength this argument
prove some more detail to strengthen this argument
flaws:
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. You need to argue against the 'interview method'. like this:
Another piece of evidence that might help us evaluate this claim involves the exact locations where Dr. Karp’s interviews took place. According to this article, Dr. Karp and his graduate students conducted interviews of “children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia.” If we were to learn that they never interviewed a single Tertian child, it would significantly weaken the conclusion. It could turn out to be the case, for example, that children on Tertia are raised communally, whereas children on other islands nearby are raised by their biological parents.
In order to fully evaluate this article, we would also need to learn more about the interview questions that Dr. Karp’s team used. What exactly did they ask? We don’t know, nor do we know what the children’s responses actually were. What did they say about their biological parents? The mere fact that they speak more frequently about their biological parents than they do about other adults does not meant hat they are raised by their biological parents. It would significantly undermine Dr. Karp’s argument if it turned out that the children said things like how much they missed their parents or how their parents had left them in a communal environment. Without knowing WHAT the children said, it is hard to accept Dr. Karp’s conclusion.
argument 3 -- OK
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