Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
dr. karp who conducted interview-based research twenty years after dr. field on childrens in tertia repudiates the claim made by dr field by stating that childrens in tertia are not raised by an entire village but by their biological parents. dr. karp might have concluded that by making the invalid assumptions , so further evidence are to be provided to make the conclusion convincing.
Firstly ,there is two decade time difference between two observations and two decade is a a hue time myriad for chnages to take place . The comparision is not feasible for two different time periods. it can be the case that people were previously raised by the entire vilage then later the bioloical parents reared their own kid. Unless dr. karp doesnot research about the child bearing practice that existed earlier in islands of tertia , the result of two observations cannot be comapared.
Secondly , The approach adopted by two reaserachers is different, one have used observation-centred approach and other have used reaserch-based pattern. thus when two different patterns are employed it is likey that the result might come different. dr. field in his approach might have seen the children spending more time in the village and being fed by anyone in the community during the day time but at night they might return to their own biological parents, or it can be that dr kalp on his interview-centred observation asked more about their parents and children talked more about their parents. thus the comparision seems invalid here too. dr. kalp should provide the questions he had used for the interview to make the cogent conclusion.
Furthermore, Some anthropolist suggest that future reasearch on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method. Even if two research will be interview based , the statistics of the observation should be clear , A vague conclusion without any detail is not likely to provide any conclusion .
In conclusion , In order to know the actual child rearing habbit island of tertai a more detailed reserch with both parents and villagers related queation is needed. thus assumptions made by the author here are inavalid and baseless.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 25 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1781 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.074 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.921 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.122 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.407 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.758 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22507122507 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98006140506 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532763532764 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4221335061 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.625 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9375 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229249483599 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625152639264 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692404340076 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117411815614 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762034669115 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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