The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"A recent national survey found that the majority of workers with access to the Internet at work had used company computers for personal or recreational activities, such as banking or playing games. In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Using electronic monitoring software is the best way to reduce the number of hours Climpson employees spend on personal or recreational activities. We predict that installing software to monitor employees' Internet use will allow us to prevent employees from wasting time, thereby increasing productivity and improving overall profits."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
While it may be true that if the Climpson company establishes monitoring program, it will prevent employees to waste time at work; however, the writer's argument does not make a cogent case. It is easy to understand that majority of workers may use the company internet for their individual activities, but the vice president of human resources at Climpson productions needs verifiable evidences to prove this recommendation.
First of all, the vice president of human resources mentions that majority of staffs use company computers and internet for personal activities such as playing game or banking. But the arguer does not provide indications for his/her prediction. There is a high possibility that workers could use the company internet during their break times. Or they may use the internet for work related activities. For example, using a company internet to check a bank account for pay stub accuracy is rational because this activity is related to work.
In addition, the author recommends monitoring employees for internet use which is not a good idea. The reason is workers may think that the company does not trust them anymore which is not going to make good connection and communication between workers and the company administers. Employees may even quit their jobs because they may not be willing to work where there is too much pressure on them. Moreover, worker may get tired to work constantly all day which will not result in productivity improvements or company profits. To strength this recommendation, the arguer needs to make consider other factors that can affect efficiency development rather than monitoring employees for the internet use. Obviously, there are many other ways to improve the industry profit such as team work, communication, promotion, or rewards.
Last but not least, the arguer does not discuss about employees' personal devices which can be used easily without any monitoring. For example, a male worker who does not have authorization to use the company computer for personal activities will definitely use his cellphone to check his bank account. Thus, installation that software to screen workers will not be advantageous that much.
The vice president of human resources at Colson industries can make this suggestion persuasive when he/she gathers information about the amount of time that employees spend on the internet for their personal needs and if they use the internet during their break times or not. After answering these questions, the arguer can make such an assumption.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ees to waste time at work; however, the writers argument does not make a cogent case. I...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82288209345 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496296296296 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3064105608 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364750643581 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122943267695 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968390391749 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227445733439 0.128457276422 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815423410688 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ees to waste time at work; however, the writers argument does not make a cogent case. I...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82288209345 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496296296296 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3064105608 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364750643581 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122943267695 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968390391749 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227445733439 0.128457276422 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815423410688 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.