The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"A recent national survey found that the majority of workers with access to the Internet at work had used company computers for personal or recreational activities, such as banking or playing games. In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Using electronic monitoring software is the best way to reduce the number of hours Climpson employees spend on personal or recreational activities. We predict that installing software to monitor employees' Internet use will allow us to prevent employees from wasting time, thereby increasing productivity and improving overall profits."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
in that argument the vice president of climpson industry argues on how employ use their companies computer with internet access use for thier personal use and as well as they they suggest a solution on that problem to president of climpson industry. first off all they reffer a survey in which they found the majority of employees use computer with internet access for personal usage like banking and plying games , but they said a majority of workers only they didnt revial any number in that prompt.that confues about how many workers use computers for personal use and how many workers dont.
according to vice president company need to implant a electronic monitering software which decrese the workers time on computer by not allowing them to personal use but preventing them to using computer doesnt mean that they dont wast thier time between working days . using the computer is not all workers trick to time passing some of them might be use another ways for time pass . like some workers might be go for washroom for long time , some workers also take frequent break for drink or coffee , some workers might be use computers for time pass but without acccessing an internet .
if the vice president implant a sofware in computer to reduce the usage of it , how much possibility are there that it will work significantly? how many chances are there that workers will not find any solution to overcome a software ? and in about to profit , how many chances of profit raising? according to vice president software implating is only way to prevent usage and gain profit which seems ambiguos , how can you assum that after implanting software they work properly.
in the conclusion , profit depends upon how you maintain workers productivity not just by implanting a software but also focusing on thier activiy and working style . so it does not justify properly how software increse workers productivity and profit they need give more information to clarrify that.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 22 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1608 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.419 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 66 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.58 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.576 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.406 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96352583587 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5273624921 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471124620061 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.1227364271 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.454545455 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9090909091 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 32.0 5.25449101796 609% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295649913835 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117961143209 0.0743258471296 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10119429626 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169517250122 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114260149408 0.0628817314937 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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