The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In an official letter the Vice president of Climpson Industries recommended the company’s president to implement electronic monitoring system of company’s employees’ to track their internet usage to improve their productivity and efficiency. As per the Company’s HR Vice president it is a ‘punishable’ crime to use company’s internet during work hours. However, this recommendation can be properly evaluated after considering three after effects and questions that may arise.
So firstly in an era of internet is it really possible to work without internet? In today’s world each and every sector of organizations, especially industries are very competitive and to be an active participant in the completion all the employee of an organization needs to be updated on what’s happening around the market. Is it really possible to be updated without internet. Not just to be updated even to complete a simple task or to learn a new thing, internet support is a must. For example, if someone wants to learn a new technique or to develop a new process he or she needs to learn about different methods first and make a comparison and to do so internet resources need to be explored first like google, youtube, wikipidia etc. If the usage of these critical websites are blocked then the productivity or innovation of the company will be reduced to a great extent and company will suffer a great loss.
Secondly, the VC of HR assumes that, employees use internet only for personal usage like gaming, shopping, entertainment etc. and waste their productive hours. Even if they do need to consider that is there any other options to mitigate this issue like blocking only some specific websites and specific contents of website to ‘control” their internet usage instead of fully ousting such an important resource. Because if that’s possible then instead of taking some exaggerated actions like ‘punishing’ the employees for the internet usage, some specifics sites maybe blocked to enhance their productivity.
Furthermore, another thing need to keep in mind that this kind of ‘rule’ might not be welcomed in the office. Employees can take it as privacy breach for the ‘monitoring movement’ of someone’s internet usage. Fair enough! So need to ensure if there has been any kind of discussion regarding the recommendation that if that’s acceptable to the employees. Because as a company you cannot progress much by triggering your employees. You need your employees trust and also you need to trust your employees as well to be a ‘good’ organization.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now still seems pretty flawed. Before considering to implement the recommendation some major consideration and after effects need to be evaluated first. Otherwise, the main purpose of ‘improving the work efficiency’ in the organization will go in vain.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 2323 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.05 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.89 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.469 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.356 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rove their productivity and efficiency. As per the Company’s HR Vice president it ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...effects and questions that may arise. So firstly in an era of internet is it r...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
...specific contents of website to ‘control” their internet usage instead of fully o...
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Line 4, column 355, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... if that’s acceptable to the employees. Because as a company you cannot progress much b...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considering implementing'.
Suggestion: considering implementing
...s now still seems pretty flawed. Before considering to implement the recommendation some major considera...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, another thing, for example, in conclusion, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28695652174 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15770130074 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510869565217 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1205866035 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.80952381 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.70786347227 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269972793307 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819397174254 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108687808034 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158626160026 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133472955776 0.0628817314937 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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