Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The main conclusion drawn by the author in the given argument states that the so-called Palean baskets are not Palean, but this argument consists of assumptions that are not verifiably true. This makes the line of reasoning of the argument weak and unconvincing. Incomplete data also prevents the author from having a wider view in his opinions.
First of all, the fact that no Palean boats have been found yet does not provide a concrete evidence of the Paleans not crossing the Brim river. What if the boats are yet to be found? Consideration of these questions could assist in resolving the problem of the so-called Palean baskets. Discovery of Palean boats in the coming years could strengthen the statement that those disparate baskets were derived from Palea. Also, the author states that Brim river was too long and deep to be crossed. What if the the river was shallow at that time? Serious environmental changes could have occured during the course of history. This could provide odds in favour of the initial claim of the argument.
Second of all, it could be possible that the denizens of Lithos had the requisite boat technology to cross the Brim river to reach Palea. The Paleans could have taught them the techniques for making their special woven baskets or even sold them some. This consideration could explain the discovery made by modern archaeologists in the village of Lithos and stand in favour of the initial statement that Palean baskets are truely Palean. Proof of existence of Lithosian boats from the same slice of time could provide a strong evidence against the author’s claim.
Furthermore, the author presumes that Paleans did not have any other alternative except for crossing the river by boats. What if there was an alternative method to cross the river? Analysis of the geographical details of the Palean and Lithos reigons could provide an insight into other pathways connecting these two villages. The Paleans could have found new ways to overcome the constraint introduced by the river. What if there was a bridge constructed across the river that could not survive through the passage of time?
Hence, some questions still need to be answered so as to develop a clear picture of the Palean baskets problem. Therefore, the author’s claim about the origin of special woven Palean baskets cannot be held true, primarily because of dearth of evidence and incompleteness of historical data.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The main conclusion drawn by the author in the given argument states that the so-called Palean baskets are not Palean, but this argument consists of assumptions that are not verifiably true.
Error: so-called Suggestion: called
Error: verifiably Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Serious environmental changes could have occured during the course of history.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This consideration could explain the discovery made by modern archaeologists in the village of Lithos and stand in favour of the initial statement that Palean baskets are truely Palean.
Error: truely Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Analysis of the geographical details of the Palean and Lithos reigons could provide an insight into other pathways connecting these two villages.
Error: reigons Suggestion: regions
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argument 1 -- partly correct
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not really
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1986 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.916 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.512 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.328 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...oo long and deep to be crossed. What if the the river was shallow at that time? Serious...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...oo long and deep to be crossed. What if the the river was shallow at that time? Serious...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...nvironmental changes could have occured during the course of history. This could provide odds in fav...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ny other alternative except for crossing the river by boats. What if there was an...
^^
Line 9, column 49, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ome questions still need to be answered so as to develop a clear picture of the Palean b...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, as to, even so, except for, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05940594059 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60516950432 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49504950495 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4497028579 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9090909091 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155290927531 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491843946996 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471130321292 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924731133385 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251981534118 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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