Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author argues that Palean baskets are not uniquely Palean. To substantiate his/her claim he/she takes into account the following observations and assumptions: first, such a basket has been found in Lithos across the Brim river, second, the Brim river is deep and broad and third, no Palean boats have been found.
Though, it may be true that a Palean basket have been found across the Brim river in ‘Lithos’, this itself is not a cogent argument to prove that Palean baskets didn’t specifically belong to Palean people. If those baskets were not uncommon among other non-Palean people then the same baskets should have been widespread in far-off non-Palean regions and not just across the Brim River asking to be found and excavated by the archaeologists. Moreover, finding of just one basket is too small a number to conclude anything.
The other assumption takes into account the breadth and depth of the Brim river implying that it is not possible to cross it without a boat and hence the baskets couldn’t have been taken along across the river by Palean people. Here, the ability of some, if not all, Palean people to swim across the Brim river is undermined without evidence. Another logical point being ignored here is that even in pre-historic time the trade of goods and mobility of the masses were prevalent. Even if the Paleans could not sail across the river due to their presumed inability to make boats as well as to swim, other non-Palean boat making tribes could have simply crossed the river into the Palean villages for barter trading.
The author overlooks the common geographical and environmental alterations that may have occurred over such long period. It may be possible that the river was shallow and narrow back then. This would have allowed Palean people to simply walk across the river to sell their baskets in Lithos. Also plausible is the unaddressed assumption that there existed no river at all between these two villages and that they were one. Moreover, the possibility of an ancient bridge connecting the two villages and unable to withstand the tests of the time cannot be simply denied.
The evidence that no Palean boats have yet been found doesn’t prove that the Paleans could not construct boats at all. There is a fair chance that those ancient wreckages may have decomposed over the time thanks to the drastic weather changes. It may also be a case that just like hitherto the archaeologists were not being able to find Palean baskets in non-Palean villages, they are not able to excavate the boats in Palean villages. And it may be just a matter of time that they may start finding few if they continue digging the earth with more sophisticated approach.
To substantiate the claim that the so-called Palean baskets are not uniquely Palean, the archaeological teams must start looking for them in far flung non-Palean areas not just across a river no matter how deep or broad it is now. The claim will further be strengthened if they are able to show that the number of artefacts found in the other non-Palean regions is also comparable to the quantity so far excavated in Palean villages suggesting that they were a commonplace thing and not just exclusive to Palean people.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- somehow duplicated to argument 1.
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possible arguments for argument 3: the sample is small, only one sample.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2626 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.74 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.458 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.45 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...skets didn't specifically belong to Palean people. If those baskets were not...
^^
Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...river to sell their baskets in Lithos. Also plausible is the unaddressed assumption...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, well, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2715.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 549.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94535519126 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62226514009 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431693989071 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1621304071 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.75 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.45 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211712240126 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800677785196 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569317239175 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140406870215 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430055697323 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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