Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found
only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed
to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered
such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The
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Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by
boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets
were not uniquely Palean.
According to the conclusion, the author claims that the Woven baskets by a particular distinctive pattern which are only be found in the immediate vicinity of the eprehistoric village of Palea were not unique just because the similar have been discovered in Lithos. Although this conclusion is seemingly valid at first glimpse, it still needs some evidence and details to solve its tenuous.
To begin with, the author mentions the Brim River that is very deep and broad, which is difficult to across it for an ancient village. However, the geographical circumstance of the river in ancient is arcane. Is it still deep and broad? Probably no, in all likelihood, this river may be narrow and shallow in ancient times or it not exists in the generation of plea village. Therefore, it is easily to across the river and transport their woven baskets to Lithos, to exclude the possibility, the author should provide more evidence and information to justify the conclusion.
Even though the river still deep and broad in ancient, but it is untenable if no Palean boats have been found. There are a myriad of reasons why boats of using for across were vanished. First, the boats might be decayed. Wooden boats is the technology limitation for ancient people who are likely not to comprehend how to contain these boats decayed by bacteria and fungus and the size of it might be small, just about twenty people, one boat is sufficient to ensure them to across the Brim River. When this village disappeared, the boat also will be destroyed and vanished slightly.
Moreover, if these possibilities are excluded. Village people still can transport the basket by other ways, commercial roads maintaining trades in several villages is general in the history, the eprehistoric village of Palea may be also exchange cargoes including the Woven basket. Therefore, they never need to across the rover to transport the baskets. Making a survey or study of the exist of trade road is necessary to corroborate the accuracy and reliability of this conclusion.
Consequently, the author should to resolve the these possibilities and eliminate them to guarantee the conclusion does hold water.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1769 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.366 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.306 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...lean boats have been found. There are a myriad of reasons why boats of using for acros...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 383, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...he baskets. Making a survey or study of the exist of trade road is necessary to corrobora...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05292479109 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74479144762 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532033426184 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3805328552 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.705882353 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17427058177 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048067000384 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100791772351 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985046228377 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107273597158 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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