Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Dr. Benson is a renowned scientist known for his work in biochemistry and cardiology to establish the link between high blood pressure and heart disease. In a paper published ten years ago, he postulates that consuming salty foods increases the salt content of the blood and puts
those individuals at greater risk of heart disease due to high blood pressure. A recent study published by Dr. Benson shows that consuming some salty foods is healthy, but warns that consuming sugary foods can lead to heart disease. At a recent convention, he gave a presentation
concluding that high blood pressure is definitely linked to heart disease.
The argument bears statements related to scientific studies by Dr. Benson, though the premise is full of contradictions and unwarranted arguments. The author mentioned that at a recent convention, Dr. Benson gave a presentation concluding that high blood pressure is definitely linked to heart disease and provided undifensible evidence to support this argument, which needs to be addressed.
The author of the argument cited a statement about the paper published ten years ago to show the link between high blood pressure and heart disease. In that paper, Dr. Benson postulates that consuming salty foods increases the salt content of the blood and put individuals at risk of heart disease due to high blood pressure. I found these aregument incomplete as the auther has not provided further details of how salt increase the blood pressure. The author didn't provide any validity of the paper of Dr. Benson as where it was published and how valid it was and now. As we know many scientific discoveries which we have accepted as true, later turn out to be flawed. However, anothere issue with the same argument is that how salt raises the blood pressure. If salts taken as raw increase blood pressure or salt taken with food can increse blood pressure. Also, how much increment in the blood pressure caused by salt intake is unknown. Therefore, the author should provide more of these details from the paper and who has approved it and how its validation is still acceptable to make this statement valid.
Another study provided by Dr. Benson states that consuming some salty food is healthy but warns that consuming sugary foods can lead to heart disease. This argument itself, made above argument invalid as it mentioned that the salted food is healthy. Dr. Benson belied that the sugary food can lead to heart disease in the resent study but there are no further probe has been provided in the argument like how sugary food cause high blood pressure. Even if it is true that the sugary food can lead heart disease it doesn't support the author's conclusion that the high blood pressure is linked to heart disease. Therefore, this argument stands no longer to support the author's main point.
All in all, the main point the author wants to convey, it supported by irrelevent arguments and therefore fails to convince its point. The author need to provide more related and convincing evidence to make this argument valid. To make this argument stronger, the author needs to provide details about further studies and papers and elaborate the link between high blood pressure and heart disease, rather just conjecturing.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2146 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.888 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.432 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.319 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.163 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gument, which needs to be addressed. The author of the argument cited a statemen...
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Line 4, column 461, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...increase the blood pressure. The author didnt provide any validity of the paper of Dr...
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Line 4, column 810, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... taken as raw increase blood pressure or salt taken with food can increse blood p...
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Line 6, column 361, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'probes'?
Suggestion: probes
...e resent study but there are no further probe has been provided in the argument like ...
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Line 6, column 449, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... sugary food cause high blood pressure. Even if it is true that the sugary food can lea...
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Line 6, column 515, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e sugary food can lead heart disease it doesnt support the authors conclusion that the...
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Line 6, column 534, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ead heart disease it doesnt support the authors conclusion that the high blood pressure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01830663616 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4920255181 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439359267735 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8684750733 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.421052632 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94736842105 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142342285256 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600896952671 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045075020046 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116537403659 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423671954954 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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