Your recent article on corporate downsizing in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this claim is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy, which found that since 1999 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated, bringing the unemployment rate in Elthyria to its lowest level in decades. Moreover, two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time.
In the memo, the author argues that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing is not a serious economic hardship. He provides several pieces of evidence on recent report on the Elthyrian economy and job conditions of currently created. At first glance, this may seem convincing, but the lack of evidence leads me to question its validity.
First, the author needs to provide solid evidence on the Elthyrian economy since 1999. He states that far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated. However, it is plausible that the current economy of Elthyria is adverse, and the total number of created job is still minute. Also, it is likely that the population of Elthyria might have increased. Then, more jobs should be created than before to keep consistent economic state. Therefore, the economy of Elthyria faces severe hardships because of surplus competent workers who have lost jobs.
Second, the author needs to supplement the argument with concrete evidence on competent workers finding adequate jobs and unemployment rate. The author asserts that created job is greater than eliminated job, so workers do not have to worry about finding jobs. However, it is possible that "competent" worker might not obtain created jobs. Since competent worker may want to get higher salaries than novices, it would be harder to obtain jobs. In addition, the lowest level of unemployment rate may not be marginal. Plus, if the actual number of citizen in Elthyria is substantial, the unemployed worker may not be negligible. The competent workers who lost jobs face serious problems.
Lastly, more specific evidence is needed on the soundness of the tendencies of newly created jobs. The "tendency" does not mean actual "record". Therefore, lots of competent workers may not earn above-average salary. Even though newly created jobs pay above-average wages, the average wage might no be significant. If the economy of Elthyria is adverse, most of wages in various area would be minute, and their averaged wage is still negligible. The employment condition of Elthyria is not good.
In brief, the author's claim is unconvincing. To bolster the argument, the author needs to give more verified information of employment condition in Elthyria.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 318, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e-average wages, the average wage might no be significant. If the economy of Elthy...
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Line 13, column 376, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the wages') or simply say ''most wages''.
Suggestion: most of the wages; most wages
... If the economy of Elthyria is adverse, most of wages in various area would be minute, and th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, in addition, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32336956522 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99205267237 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486413043478 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1328384139 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.625 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258304936292 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822863245897 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103168081062 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146631309424 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881343783027 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.98 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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