In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In asserting that without past achievements within a field, it is impossible to make a significant contribution in the field, the author of the argument failed to acknowledge other diverse issues – fields of endeavor that have been untouched by the humankind – besides fields that include some past achievements that could influence the individual or individuals in the certain field. Nevertheless, I agree with the statement to the extent that past achievements can help as a motive to drive the individual to success, but it is not necessarily impossible to have a breakthrough without them. In other cases, as will be elucidated in the points below it will not be so.
Firstly, it is acceptable as a fact that past achievements in any field can work as incentives for the future generations. Take for example the ideology of the majority of people before the 1960s, regarding being able to complete a one-kilometer run in less than one minute. Unless for the pioneer runner who broke the record of 1 kilometer and ran less than one minute, the people of nowadays would have still believed that it is implausible to complete such a task. After that event, more than two thousand people were able to complete the run in less than one minute, including high school students. As a result, it can be seen that the ideology has changed. Just like the old saying “If someone could do it before, you can do it too”. Not only does the past achievements help individuals to find a motivation for their ride, but also aid them as a guide.
However, with these examples, it could be argued that for a major contribution, in any field, past achievements is mandatory. But when viewed holistically it is not so. Simply put, without any prior success in a certain field, the job of the individual to gain profound success is hard, but not out of reach. Take for instance Thomas Edison, the first scientist who invented the light bulb. Not being able to rely on prior achievements to build his incentives, Edison had to rely on his strong self-belief for finding a suitable compound that can be used as the string. To elaborate on, one can do whatever he/she wants just by believing in oneself. The more a humankind fails, the more he is determined to try more for success. In addition, it is only our cupidity that drives, nothing else.
All in all, contrary to the claim above, one can have a significant contribution in a field whether there have been past achievements or not. Past achievements can help an individual as incentives, but without them, one is still able to have a major breakthrough only by the power of his/her will.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: MAJOR_BREAKTHROUGH[1]
Message: Use simply 'breakthrough'.
Suggestion: breakthrough
...thout them, one is still able to have a major breakthrough only by the power of his/her will.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78384279476 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85192040077 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478165938865 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2474747045 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.55 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264730422307 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709856339381 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841720704696 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172534722241 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109424616153 0.0667264976115 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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