The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The leaders of our current society definitely need to have a sense of cooperation to become a qualified leader. A leader must be able to listen to its subordinates and compile their ideas in order to lead them into a bigger goal. However, for a young people to grow as a leader, one must be ready to be challenged by competition. Therefore, the society should encorporate both cooperation and competition to prepare its young people for leadership.
First, it is obvious that young people should have experience of growth by competiting with other people. When young people achieve a leadership position in industry, government, or any other fields, one will be facing competition throughout one's career. For example, there are countless supermarkets in United States, and they are all constantly competiting with each other to attract more customers. Sometimes, they advertise by attacking other companies' reputation. Recently, when Samsung Galaxy Note 7 was found to be exploding while charging, its competing companies, such as Apple and LG, advertised saying that their phones are safe. If young people were merely trained so that they only know cooperation, they will not be able to perform this kind of advertising techniques.
Our history also reveals to us that competition is necessary for a country to grow. By looking at country's economic growth each year, one can clearly see that communist counties, a society that runs in cooperation only, experiences less growth than other countries. Countries that exercised materialism showed higher level of economic growth since both the customers and merchants strive to meet the ideal price and quality that satisfy the demand. If the leaders were only taught to cooperate with each other, surely advancement in economics would not have been as fast as it would have been.
However, these evidences does not change the fact that leaders need to have sense of cooperation instilled in them to lead. If cooperation was not present within the comany or government faction, there would be chaos and nothing would run efficiently. For example, industry runs more effectively when people have different responsibilities. Some people may be focused on developing more products while others focus on advertising their future product. When project managers control these people effectively and give each people suitable tasks, only then the project will run most smoothly.
Looking at these evidences, leaders of government and industry will be facing both cooperation and competition.Therefore, society should prepare young people by instilling them both cooperation and competition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 448, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
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Line 2, column 549, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...s found to be exploding while charging, its competing companies, such as Apple and ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...facing both cooperation and competition.Therefore, society should prepare young people by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38498789346 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97985347969 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535108958838 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4376565252 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.2 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.65 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286810465848 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887656509945 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754872282886 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165653300871 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687059514382 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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