The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
While competition is certainly one of the forces that could be used to prepare younger generations for leadership in different fields, I would agree that the best way to prepare them would be through instilling a sense of cooperation in them. From a young age, this sense can be developed through teamwork activities, school projects, and starter jobs. Unlike the values of competition, the values of cooperation can be developed into successful leadership skills, which will not only prepare younger people for leadership roles, but will set them up to thrive in these environments.
A key aspect of any good leader is the ability to listen and respect the opinions and ideas of those around you. In turn, the leader will be able to adapt policies for the betterment of the environment while also earning the respect and trust of their peers, which will only serve to push them to become an even better leader. On the other hand, if competition is instilled over a sense of cooperation, it is likely that the leader will only adopt ideas that are suited to benefit himself, while also losing the respect from their colleagues. For example, my coworkers and I were recently being evaluated for a promotion to a supervisor job. Naturally, as we all were vying for the position, a sense of competition was in the air. However, this driving competition force compelled some of my coworkers to do outlandish things that benefited only themselves at the expense of others, such as sabotaging other coworkers behind their backs in order to get ahead in the competition for the promotion. However, it was not the coworker that gave into the competition the most; rather, it was the coworker that performed the job best by respecting the colleagues around her, listening to their ideas, and doing her best to excel at her job while also making sure her peers excelled as well. In other words, the coworker that had the strongest sense of cooperation was the one best suited for the leadership position, as the qualities that come along with a sense of cooperation are often hand in hand with leadership qualities.
This sense of cooperation can be instilled at a young age, from teaching cooperation through teamwork in sports activties to working together on school projects. In doing so, younger people are taught the values that can help develop them into a strong leadership role. Once these children grow up, this sense that has been developed into leadership skills will only thrive in envrionments such as government, industry, or other fields. One might argue that a sense of competition can also push younger people in the direction of leadership by promoting a person to be the very best out of the group, which might be a charactersitic of a leader. However, just because someone has outcompeted everyone and has excelled in a position does not necessarily mean they would make a good leader. This sense of competition will only want to make them continue to compete, and once they are a leader and at the top already, what will they do then, if there is nobody else left to compete against? In other words, once they have become a leader, if they only have competition values rather than cooperation values, they will not be able to lead properly because they will not know how to work well with others, which is a key aspect of leadership.
The claim that society should instill values of cooperation in younger people in order to best prepare them for leadership roles is one that I completely agree with. Rather than promote values of competition, which will only serve to benefit the individual competiting at the expense of everyone else, values of cooperation teach respect and innovation. In other words, cooperation values give rise to leadership skills in people, which they can begin developing from a young age.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1142, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding colleagues'?
Suggestion: the surrounding colleagues
...at performed the job best by respecting the colleagues around her, listening to their ideas, and doing he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, then, well, while, for example, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 58.6224719101 169% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3179.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 651.0 442.535393258 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88325652842 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05120793913 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7096208165 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411674347158 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 996.3 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.3388335599 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.380952381 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257112841269 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890955020918 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597139367924 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185513015599 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045110966601 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.