The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

As they say "Leaders are not born, they are made", many factors go into making a successful leader. The given prompt recommends that it best to instill a sense of cooperation over competition to prepare the youth for leadership in various fields such as government, industry, etc. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the given recommendation and argue that competition is more imperative for leadership for these three reasons.

First, right from early age, we are intoduced to the sense of competition. It is just a natural proclivity:how parents raise their child. It has huge implications in building the personality of the child. Consider a child, for instance, who is taught to compete with his fellow classmates in every aspect, such as scoring higher in tests or excelling in competative sports. This would invariably enforce competativeness in the child and shape his personality. Also, it is highly likely that the child would perceive competativeness as rightous as his parents have advocated it. This example illustrates how competition is instilled right from early stages.

Furthermore, one cannot escape the competition. It is vital that inorder to survive in this highly globalized world - where each person aims to excel and compete, one must alleviate his intent to compete. For instance, a new company aiming to sell computer in an area pre-occupied with large influx of computer stores. If the company chooses to be cooperative, maybe in terms of agreements or signing deals for sharing technology with competitors, there are high vhanges that company would fail to survive due to the highly 'competative' market. This conforms that one cannot afford to procrastinate competative intent.

Finally, there are numerous factors that contribute to leadership. The prompt pre dominantely focuses on only two factors, on the contraty, factors such as perseverance, human skills, aptitude, etc are also immensely germane. For instance, a leader being only compettaive or cooperative cannot provide eficacy if he/she isn't well equipped with people skills to manage the team. Thus, we must focus on others factors too, apart from competition and cooperation.

Of course, some would argue that cooperation undermines competition when looked at larger aspects such as national security, or sheer political will to resolve issues in national interest. However, it is only pertinent to some limited fields which requires cooperation in larger interest of people. In most common fields, competition preceeds cooperation for a successful leadership. Hence, it is best to instill a sense of competition in younger people for leadership in government, industry, etc.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'classmates'.
Suggestion: classmates
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...enforce competativeness in the child and shape his personality. Also, it is highl...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...rative cannot provide eficacy if he/she isnt well equipped with people skills to man...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, apart from, for instance, of course, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46043165468 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07897339226 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568345323741 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7433971763 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1304347826 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65217391304 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210507901369 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590412897213 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740779377113 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119995502305 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823149924992 0.0667264976115 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, apart from, for instance, of course, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments