"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The youth of today are the learers of tomorrow. The given prompt suggests that it is better to prepare the youth, for leadership in government, industry, etc., by instilling a sense of cooperation rather than competition. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the recommendation and argue that the youth must be well adept with cooperativeness for a propitious future of the nation.
First, it is imperative to be cooperative in order to realize great achievements. When one person works hard for a goal and many people working hard on the same goal makes a substantial difference. For instance, Neil Armstrong stepping on the surface of the Moon is perhaps the greatest feat of human mankind. It would not have been possible without the cooperation and sincere efforts of thousands of scientist, teachnicians, enineers and other mission control staff. Cooperation invigorates the plausibility for success many folds. Hence, it is imperative for the youth to realize that being cooperative is imperative for achieving great feats.
Furthermore, since the youth of today are the leaders of tomorrow, it is very important to make them understand the importance of being together and helping others, especially since deeds are reciprocal in nature. Coopration helps reduce any viability of intracacies arising due to severe agnominity and competition to succeed. For instance, suppose in task of instituting an important policy such as NEP(National Education Policy), it does not help when there are difference in opinions, leading to only hostility and tensions. Whereas cooperation would help bring all the opinions on the table to be discussed, debated and can be used to refine the policy to augment hte efficacy of the policy. Therefore, we must induce a sense of cooperation and refrain from trivial compeition.
Ofcourse some might argue that in our ever increasingly globalized world, one simply cannot disregard compeition as trivial. I agree that competition is ubiquitous and one must be competitive to mitigate the situation at hand but looking from a larger aspect, cooperation must precede competition for greater cause especially when leading a government, industry or a company. Cooperation will help surmount any intracacies, purging the hostility and help realize greater achievement, in course for a propitious future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...eaders of tomorrow, it is very important to make them understand the importance o...
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Suggestion:
...o make them understand the importance of being together and helping others, espec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40163934426 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10766257237 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571038251366 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8626214579 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.294117647 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5294117647 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187015647851 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594452347412 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464400275453 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117286433827 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353006643473 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.