Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Choice of one's dream and goals are not a trivial one. The given prompt claims that young people must be motivated to pursue "worthy" goals instead of dreams. The reasoning provided is based on the premise that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the claim and argue that it is more imperative to pursue propitious goals instead of mere dreams.
First, there are many shortcomings in picking and pursuing banal dreams. Moreover, it is rather suggested that young people must follow goals that are propitious, with respect to their future career and betterment of the society as a whole. For instance, choosing a college major withstanding it's future scope, job prospects and growth of the particular field would invigorate the chances of success dramatically. Also, the student's personal interest also matter in this regard. Thus, we must pursue goals which are propitious.
Furthermore, research has consistently demonstrated that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. It is human-nature. Ever since the inception of archaic civilizations, history has been evidence to such hedonistic pursuits due to selfishness. For instance, the great truculent world wars are a result of mere selfish of bragging rights over land and extending one's territory. This illustrates how dangerous it is to follow such dreams, given the natural proclivity towards them inherently. Terrorism and drug mafias have proven the same. Therefore, any such pursuits must be decimated and dettered.
Finally, it is the responsibility of elders, alongside society, to lead young people on the right track in life. They must be afforded the liberity to pursue their dreams, but it must be checked when it takes an untoward course. We are all aware of the fact that young minds are mallaeable and liberal, the society must refrain from adultering their minds. Consider a teenager indulging in drugs and crimes, they must be made to understand the adversities it might lead to. They must be moulded so they can discern the differece between whats right and wrong, no just for themselves but for society in general. Thus, elders in the society must realize their responsibility and help young people.
Of course, some might argue that not all people are inherently selfish. I do agree that such generalization is too extreme and unfair. Moreover, worthiness of goal is highly subjective matter. Nevertheless, it is also recommended to follow "worthy" goals which have proven to be more propitious.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Choice of ones dream and goals are not a trivial one. ...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...bragging rights over land and extending ones territory. This illustrates how dangero...
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Line 7, column 538, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
... they can discern the differece between whats right and wrong, no just for themselves...
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Line 7, column 561, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ifferece between whats right and wrong, no just for themselves but for society in ...
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Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended following'.
Suggestion: recommended following
...ective matter. Nevertheless, it is also recommended to follow 'worthy' goals which have pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in general, of course, in my opinion, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30940594059 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96375000411 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542079207921 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.024225383 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251134262302 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699404383158 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710824001482 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151808050449 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755381833631 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.