The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In today's world of ever-increasing developments and advancements, people are pushing hard to cope up with this running world. In every field, there are thousands of people volunteering or trying to secure their positions. There is competition everywhere, no place in the world is left where you can get on top easily without competing. So one has to get in his/her strides from a very early stage and keep on striving for success it till one comes on top. In my opinion, this competition is necessary and so I disagree with the author that the best way to prepare young people for leadership is through only cooperation and not competition.
Firstly, nowadays everybody dreams of achieving the best despite of the backgrounds they come from. So there is a lot of competition in every field to gain the topmost spot. This competition plays an indispensable role in any individual's life. In my view, people from a very early age must be taught to compete for their position as they understand the importance of it from a very early age and not take the position for granted. For instance, consider the example of the Indian cricketer MS Dhoni. Ms. Dhoni hails from a very small village in Jharkhand. At his start of the career, he had to compete with big giants of the game like Sachin Tendulkar, Rahul Dravid to get that Indian captainship. It was his zest for the competition that made encouraged him and we can see the success he has achieved with it. Similarly, in every field be it politics, industry, or any other the sense to compete for anything is necessary.
However, I agree that instilling a sense of cooperation is also a vital part to prepare the young. But, the world today has changed drastically. Everybody in this world is not as selfless as they were before. People only care for their success and not for anyone else. For instance, in the case of the tech giant Mr. Ratan Tata. He is one of the most artless men who is leading the Tata industries. He has always cooperated in every field rather than just focussing on his company's interests. So people must be taught to be like him and contribute in every field by cooperation.
To conclude, I would like to say that competition is one of the best forms of encouragement one can get to achieve whatever one dreams of. To compete, will teach him not only the importance of that field but the motivation to get on top. So I believe competition is a must in every field be it science, politics, sports, or any other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...tion plays an indispensable role in any individuals life. In my view, people from a very ea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, similarly, so, still, as to, for instance, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63574660633 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76667602412 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488687782805 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1747757422 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.96 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.68 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306986016985 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797193035886 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785518248572 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186075698005 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498241299442 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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