The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The role of a Leader is to lead the troop. It is the leader's decisions that usually decide the result of its team. Leadership has several essential elements like discipline, smartness, capability, vision,cooperation, ability to accomplish, etc. These few elements are important to every leader irrespective of their their field. The quality of leadership is built at early age. The values have to be instilled right from the beginning, to be a successful leader. Having, stated that Competition is necessary to ignite the fire, push beyond boundaries, setup goals and move forward. However, competition should be healthy instead of toxic. It should help a person bring out the best in them not the other way round.
Competition, according to me is one of the many important thing for development and growth, given the fact that its looked upon in a positive way. It is important to observe other people, observe their work , set goals and work hard in order to achieve it. Competition among individuals does not necessarily be achieveing the same thing but with better performance rather, helping you find your goal but path has to be your own. Having a sense of individuality or uniqueness and doing it in most authentic way makes leaders.
To support my idea, I would like to take example of two most prominent Leaders from the field of Politics in the recent times. Barack Obama, The Ex-President of The United States of America and Narendra Modi, The Prime Minister of India. These two individuals do have a many qualities in common like their love for the nation, their mission to make their country better than the others, however, the two of them have their own sense of Individuality. Barack Obama, became President on his 40s and retired in his 50s whereas Narendra Modi became Prime Minister in this 60s and still continues in his 70s. One is the President of of a vey well established, super power nation, whereas one is the Prime Minister of a developing countries. Had Narendra Modi thought of competing Barack Obama or Vladimir Putin or any other Prime Minister or President, the situation in India would have only gone worst. He takes a deep look into the matter of his own countries and cooperates with his ministers and works accordingly.
In order to conclude, I would bolster the fact that, it is important to connect with other people, look upto them; but not think or plan to become like them. A true leader is the one who is open to explore, innovate and make a unique mark for themselves wit
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , cooperation
...iscipline, smartness, capability, vision,cooperation, ability to accomplish, etc. These few...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...artness, capability, vision,cooperation, ability to accomplish, etc. These few el...
^^
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: their
...portant to every leader irrespective of their their field. The quality of leadership is bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...th, given the fact that its looked upon in a positive way. It is important to observe other peopl...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...observe other people, observe their work , set goals and work hard in order to ach...
^^
Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. Barack Obama, The Ex-President of The United States of America and Narendra Mo...
^^
Line 5, column 627, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...tinues in his 70s. One is the President of of a vey well established, super power nat...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 792, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...odi thought of competing Barack Obama or Vladimir Putin or any other Prime Minist...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, look, so, still, then, well, whereas, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84027777778 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74762932399 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543981481481 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1149793732 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0454545455 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130501334174 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357827944023 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290577720649 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833001969831 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282284344639 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , cooperation
...iscipline, smartness, capability, vision,cooperation, ability to accomplish, etc. These few...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...artness, capability, vision,cooperation, ability to accomplish, etc. These few el...
^^
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: their
...portant to every leader irrespective of their their field. The quality of leadership is bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...th, given the fact that its looked upon in a positive way. It is important to observe other peopl...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...observe other people, observe their work , set goals and work hard in order to ach...
^^
Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. Barack Obama, The Ex-President of The United States of America and Narendra Mo...
^^
Line 5, column 627, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...tinues in his 70s. One is the President of of a vey well established, super power nat...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 792, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...odi thought of competing Barack Obama or Vladimir Putin or any other Prime Minist...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, look, so, still, then, well, whereas, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84027777778 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74762932399 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543981481481 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1149793732 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0454545455 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130501334174 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357827944023 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290577720649 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833001969831 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282284344639 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.