An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The deficiency of vitamin A amongst many citizens in Tagus is a serious concern. The International Development Organization's(IDO) step to provide new breed of millet and paying subsides to farmers is commendable. The author states here that they millet should mostly be accepted and the government of Tagus should promote it; there are many questions that arises which should be answered to find out whether the recommendation will be effective or not.
The first question that arises is that once the millet are out in market how well has it been doing? Is it being widely accepted and if yes are the helping in increasing vitamin A level; is it safe to consume? Does it have any side effect on consuming?, is it affordable to the citizens?, does the country have the weather conditions to cultivate the crop? Firstly, it is important to know well are the localities accepting this into their food habits. Have they felt any difference on including it in their diet. The other important thing to know whether they are able to afford it enough to consume on a daily basis, It is important that it should be affordable to the people as it has a basic nutrient value.
Once the above questions are answered in affirmative , the next focus should be to cultivate within the country. Just providing subsides wont do the work. The weather conditions have to be appropriate for cultivation. The weather conditions if also satisfies, it is good to go to be a part of their daily lives
To conclude, combating the issue a long term plan has to be sought so that it doesn't occur again. A well planned strategy should be created and evaluations must be done my the IDO and the government of Tagus, for the well being of Tagus citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 302.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7417218543 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76824710996 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513245033113 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4210230501 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92857142857 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190620832761 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655495133273 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642711976968 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116634167545 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784136327005 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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