Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
The topic makes a controversial claim that people in power in any field should be relegated from their position and the power should be handed to new leadership to ensure success of any enterprise. Although, a new leadeship may be fruitful in some stangnat managements, it cannot be always guarenteed. Thus, i generally disagree with the opinion that new leadership is surest way for success.
Firstly, it is very important to keep in mind that experience is very powerful tool for any enterprise. Through years of trainings and dealing with various circumstances in a workplace, people get more adept in their job. Such skill is only gained in practical environments and vary in some aspects from the theoritical knowledge gained in universities. For example, in education sector, a professor needs years of experience be in that position, his theoritical knowledge of subject along with other pragmatic knowledges like dealing with students, can only be learned from continued exposure and experience in the field. Also it is worth noting that, business, politics, education and government are very different with each other and no such generalizations can be made. For instance, it may be good idea to make changes in leadership in goverment in more shorter span of time as compared to education or business.
Moreover, five years as mentioned in the topic is very short span for making changes in primary positions of power. Take, politics for example, a good politician needs many decades of dedication in his belief and politics to reach a influential position, it takes time to build trust in such postions, and if such postion is rather given to new leadeship with less experience, then its ramifications may be seen negatively in a society or nation as a whole in a negative way. Thus despite the advantages of changes leadership five years seems very short time period to make such huge claim.
Nevertheless, the reason provided that revitalization through new leadership will certainly revitalize the instititution is not acceptable. No guarentee can be made whether the new leadership will make the condtition better or deteorate further. The results are only perceived after its implementation. Therefore, it would be unwise to think that merely making new recruitments is the way to revitalize a enterprise.
In conclusion, although some well thought changes in power in any enterprise in a reasonable time period may be effective to ameolirate the institution's status, such certain claims cannot be made. As long as the someone in power is working functionally well for their position asnd their presence adds the value to enterprise, such hasty decisions should be avoided.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the surest'.
Suggestion: is the surest
...ee with the opinion that new leadership is surest way for success. Firstly, it is very...
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y be learned from continued exposure and experience in the field. Also it is wort...
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Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... exposure and experience in the field. Also it is worth noting that, business, poli...
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Line 3, column 856, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'shorter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: shorter
...e changes in leadership in goverment in more shorter span of time as compared to education o...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ion in his belief and politics to reach a influential position, it takes time to ...
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Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ively in a society or nation as a whole in a negative way. Thus despite the advantages of changes...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...or nation as a whole in a negative way. Thus despite the advantages of changes leade...
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Line 7, column 404, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...w recruitments is the way to revitalize a enterprise. In conclusion, although ...
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Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'institutions'' or 'institution's'?
Suggestion: institutions'; institution's
...riod may be effective to ameolirate the institutions status, such certain claims cannot be m...
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Line 9, column 209, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'someone'?
Suggestion: the; someone
...rtain claims cannot be made. As long as the someone in power is working functionally well f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21149425287 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04778866098 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503448275862 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4676627852 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.944444444 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247833702606 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845647406241 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691223741153 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148199051135 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644540020629 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.