The following appeared in a memo from a budget planner for the city of Grandview.
"Our citizens are well aware of the fact that while the Grandview Symphony Orchestra was struggling to succeed, our city government promised annual funding to help support its programs. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent, and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Such developments indicate that the symphony can now succeed without funding from city government and we can eliminate that expense from next year's budget. Therefore, we recommend that the city of Grandview eliminate its funding for the Grandview Symphony from next year's budget. By doing so, we can prevent a city budget deficit without threatening the success of the symphony."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Although, author's words appear so clear there is lot of ambiguous in the argument. It assumes that private contributions which are increased by 200 percent and as the symphony announced an increase in ticket prices for the next year are enough to help the struggling symphony and government so can stop its funding. But it is obscure while considering percentage and also increase in ticket prise always doesnt indicate that demand has increased.
Firstly, author mentioned that 200 percent increase in private contribution is already helpful for the enhancement of symphony. But a big percentage always doesn't indicate big amount in numbers. For example there were 100$ private contributions fewer. So, this just increases 300$. Thus increase in percentages cannot decide the how big the amount was. Even if the private contribution were increased in a significant number but this might not be sufficent. So, we cannot come to a conclusion that government can stop funding for symphony.
Secondly, author states that as the symphony announced there will be increase in ticket price from next year. so, it is assumed that there is in an increase in profit. but this isn't the case every time because there maybe a circumstances where the symphony was running more worse so managemnet has decided to increase the ticket price. So, as to cover up that looses.
Finally, author must have stated things more clearly like what was the increase in private contribution and what was the amount previously author must also have mentioned the actual reason for the increase in the ticket price. All of this unstated things left the argument in a ambiguous way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... percentage and also increase in ticket prise always doesnt indicate that demand has increas...
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...eft the argument in a ambiguous way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 58.6224719101 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 272.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13602941176 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69739718193 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511029411765 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.6887761644 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3125 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0847143010553 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300925608062 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302091296567 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592886120033 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224391603324 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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