Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely alig

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Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

The main purpose of education is to make people enlighten in thoughts and increase their ability to think creatively and imaginatively. The above statement gives two different opinions of people. Where one conveys that purpose of education is to free mind and spirit and other conveys that formal education tends to restrain minds and spirits rather than setting them free. I totally agree with statement because of many reasons and some instances for my assertion are stated below.

For instances let us consider an example of two engineering students. Where when is onetime grasper and the other takes certain time to understand the subject. The onetime grasper can complete his whole 4 years of engineering academics in 2 years while the other needs at least 6 years. But formal education system makes both of them to study engineering of 4 years. Where one completely fails and the other ends up wasting his 2 years of time course. In this case the education is directly constraining the thinking ability of student for two years of course because the one who can complete the course in two years, spends two more years in the same course. As ha has to face examination’s he can definitely not focus on thinking with free mind.

Moreover, a formal education system forces a student to attend college even when he or she has an ability of understanding the things by their own. If this time when they are attending college or school is allotted to some other course or study. He or she might have more comfortable rather than listening to the same stuff which they can study by sitting on their sofa.

Finally, I close here by stating that the formal education system directly effect the thinking ability of a student. So, I suggest is the education which is being carried by education institution is a big flaw. Instead students should be given their freedom and allow them study from home and exams should be conducted to test their ability.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 212, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...by education institution is a big flaw. Instead students should be given their freedom ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, moreover, so, while, as to, at least, for instance, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 335.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85373134328 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63041483438 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519402985075 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3377922037 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6470588235 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7058823529 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275974841529 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837411997328 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117812806744 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172649975124 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113051390485 0.0667264976115 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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