The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
The speaker states that since data scientists and software engineers have the best job prospects and salaries , and since the tech is dominating the future , all high school students should be compelled to study four years of computer programming. Although I do agree about the tech dominating world ,but giving the whole credibility to the computer engineers and data scientists is too extreme, cause there are various other factors related to them.
At first , The speaker is suggesting to proceed the career of software engineering and data science , he here doesnot consider that every field and profession are connected to each other. The software designed by the software engineers are used by the other profession. The data evaluated by the data scientist are used by the business company for marketting of their product . if there are no doctors then the hospital managemnt app developed by the software engineer will be of no use. if there ae no businesses to buy there product then how will the software company flourish. they will have no source to fund their product.
Secondly , if everyone starts following the career path mentioned above, then there will be only two career path remain in the world . then where will the people go when they feel sick ? choosing data science and programming means that there will be no teacher for other subject, the world will be full of tech giants and gradually there will be the scarcity of job as there will be no user but the manufacturer only. there will be on artists , no doctors , no entertainers and thus life will be mundane even to the software enginners.
Morever, mandating computer programming to the students will be restricting them from choosing their own career, and isolating them from their right to freedom. then it is likely that many uninterested students will not join high school , and even if they do , they will not progress as they would otherwise, cause their interest might lies in other field.
In conclusion , we should respect every profession and follow our interest , it is our love for the work that we do keeps us happy and productive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95786516854 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61359736024 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0715869239 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229847108828 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744865843094 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633828430218 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134756080451 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557107441647 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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