The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee — a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
According to the text, Acme Publishing Company's personnel director recommends to the company's president to provide Speed-Reading courses for employees. He has said that with the speed-reading courses, employees' productivity in many companies has increased. Also, he has pointed out some of the positive results and benefits of the course. As a result, he believes that the president should force employees to take this course to increase their productivity.
The recommendation has some weaknesses that should be considered and answered. Based on the first claim, in some companies, such a course has improved the employees ‘productivity. There are some questions that should be explained. Whether or not the background of other companies is the same as Acme company. Does Acme company need such skills for its employees as much as other companies? How comparable the needs and aims of other companies are with the Acme company? It is possible that if some companies benefit from this course, it is because of some related needs that they have had.
In the suggestion above, the personnel director has pointed out two successful graduates of this course. The problem is whether or not these samples have been chosen randomly or intentionally. The number of samples is not a good indication to prove the superiority of the course. There should be more random cases. There is no evidence to prove that the level or skill of the person who can read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours before the course was low and only with the such course has improved. Also, in the second case, do other factors have no effect on the promotion of a person to become vice president of his company? The person may before be participating in the course have tried to get promoted and accidentally during this course have gained such promotion. The ambiguities of these cases should be checked and resolved.
The expenditure of the course for each person is $500, the personnel director believes that compared to the benefits the cost of the course is low. If the company wants to pay, this cost in comparison to other running costs is reasonable. But if employees have to pay, this cost may not be affordable to all of them and also according to their duties spending money on such course might be a waste of money because it does not have any benefits for them. Also, the options mentioned for the course may not be acceptable to all employees.
Finally, the employees must not be required to attend the course. Participation in the course should be optional because compulsory courses can be counterproductive.
In conclusion, the recommendation of the director has to be checked more. According to his argument, we cannot say exactly whether or not the speed-reading course is beneficial to Acme company.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...has increased. Also, he has pointed out some of the positive results and benefits of the co...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...ome questions that should be explained. Whether or not the background of other companies is th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...raduates of this course. The problem is whether or not these samples have been chosen randomly...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ses should be checked and resolved. The expenditure of the course for each pers...
^^^
Line 10, column 124, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... to his argument, we cannot say exactly whether or not the speed-reading course is beneficial ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, as to, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02141327623 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96221236092 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426124197002 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2025052281 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8518518519 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2962962963 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360585262924 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994697758487 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907833527668 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191489852928 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101553566325 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...has increased. Also, he has pointed out some of the positive results and benefits of the co...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...ome questions that should be explained. Whether or not the background of other companies is th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...raduates of this course. The problem is whether or not these samples have been chosen randomly...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ses should be checked and resolved. The expenditure of the course for each pers...
^^^
Line 10, column 124, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... to his argument, we cannot say exactly whether or not the speed-reading course is beneficial ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, as to, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02141327623 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96221236092 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426124197002 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2025052281 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8518518519 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2962962963 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360585262924 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994697758487 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907833527668 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191489852928 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101553566325 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.