Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In my opinion, whether formal education tends to restrain people's minds and spirits depend on the different kind of education institution. For elementary and vocational schools, students' mind are restricted; however, college education tends to set students' mind free.
In elementary and vocational education, formal education tend to restrain student's mind and spririt. In the classroom, teachers have to impart fundamental expertise and rules in order to let the students have a basic understanding about the world and how to act as a citizen. For example, students will understand basic math and physic law, and they will also learn ethnic rules. When the students have violent behavior such as bullying others, teachers will punish them so as to correct their bad behavior. During these whole process, the mind and spirits of adolescent is restricted, excluding them from incorrect behavior and leading them to the realm of science.
Unlike in the elementary school,In the college, students' mind and spirits are not limited by the education system. Professors in the university encourage students to explore the world of science freely. With the fundamental knowledge they have acquired before, they are able to learn more in the field they are interested in. Since as they obtain more and more expertise in a certain field, they are able to do further research to discover new findings. They are not limited in the boundary of the knowledge existed, and they also have the chance to doubt the founded theory once there are new evidence. As the scientific society encourage such behavior, student's are stimulated to think freely and come up with diversified and creative ideas.
In addition, people's mind are confined in vocational education because they are trained to obey basic professional morals. For example, in medical training school, students will be taught basic rules such as caring about the patients; programming schools may teach some morals that programmer should not collect clients' personal information secreatly.
In conclusion, formal education free students' mind in college; while in elementary and vocational education, student's mind are restricted.
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Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43529411765 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75803324941 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.050497266 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 115.5 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126598642635 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539797992373 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570851832842 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937105828594 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632033760153 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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