Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The given prompt states that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather that set them free. The given topic is highly contentious because different people may have disparate positions and opinions in the statement. Some people can go for, while others cannot argue with it at all. Personally, I agree with the given statement that free education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather then set them free. The supporting reasons and examples for my position is presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, formal education comprise of definite syllabus, specific subjects, and relevant coursework which confine us in the limited area; we should limit our thinking in certain area only so formal education tends to restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free. For instance, Prabesh, a friend of mine, has shared his experience of formal education; he mentioned that definitely we can gain many knowledge of different fields by formal education but it confines us from learning diverse area. In his experience, he mentioned that due to formal education he could not implement his innovative idea when he was pursuing formal education but later when he completed formal education he implemented that idea. Therefore, formal education tends to restrain our mind and spirit.
Furthermore, formal education does not allow to think freely because it is designed to gain specific knowledge and it has specific pattern of teaching and learning which prevents students to think in wide horizon; it prevents innovation, and ideas because ideas and innovation needs free mindset. Therefore formal education tends to restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free. For example, Riya, an engineering student, has shared about formal education in a forum that she felt so confined during her engineering course; she mentioned that she felt formal education tends to restrain her because she was so busy in her coursework, assignments and exams that is why she could not make her mind and spirit free.
However, some argue that formal education gives us different paths to think. Although we cannot deny their argument that formal education can give many knowledge and path to think, formal education push us to think in specific area rather than broad area. For example, I am also an engineer, to get certificate and engineering knowledge of my field I joined formal education in Tribhuvan University where I feel so many pressure, workload of studies. During four years period I compromised by not allowing my mind and spirit free because of formal education and I had to complete so many tasks within specific time frame. Yes, I also agree that formal education give us knowledge of specific area but at the same time, it restrains our mind and spirit rather than set them free.
To sum up, the reasons and examples presented support my position that I agree with the given statement. The reasons presented tells that formal education restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free. The examples of Prabesh, Riya and myself illustrates that formal education did not give us free thinking.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...o restrain our minds and spirits rather then set them free. The supporting reasons a...
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Line 2, column 33, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
...raphs. To begin with, formal education comprise of definite syllabus, specific subjects, a...
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Line 2, column 408, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...e mentioned that definitely we can gain many knowledge of different fields by formal...
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Line 2, column 408, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
...e mentioned that definitely we can gain many knowledge of different fields by formal education...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'thinking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: thinking
...ermore, formal education does not allow to think freely because it is designed to gain s...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...deas and innovation needs free mindset. Therefore formal education tends to restrain our ...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...argument that formal education can give many knowledge and path to think, formal edu...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
...argument that formal education can give many knowledge and path to think, formal education pus...
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Line 4, column 415, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pressure seems to be countable; consider using: 'many pressures'.
Suggestion: many pressures
...in Tribhuvan University where I feel so many pressure, workload of studies. During four years...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free. The examples of Prabesh, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 33.0505617978 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 12.9106741573 263% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 515.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11067961165 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59899557881 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41359223301 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.0 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.15108554 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.6 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342502785831 0.243740707755 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159132329102 0.0831039109588 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121248056508 0.0758088955206 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244310105366 0.150359130593 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578684116389 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.