Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Formal education has been practically compulsory in society only in recent human history. Previously, formal education was not required to obtain a place in the workforce. Due to increasing complexity of workplace and technological advancements, formal education is mandatory to get a job now. I agree with the statement because I think formal education is a necessity of a technologically advanced society, not a means to free our minds and spirits. To achieve spiritual and mental freedom, self-study driven by passion and curiosity is much more effective.
At school level, formal education teaches us basic mathematics, language skills, social sciences and science to provide us a background for further education. At higher levels, we only obtain degrees that lead us to certain places in the workforce. The whole structure of formal education is designed primarily to serve the purpose of developing skilled workforce. To do that, the students are indoctrinated and boxed in a methodological way of learning and applying their skills. Exposure to knowledge may inspire mental and spiritual freedom to few, but most are trained to be a just a participant in the workforce.
Formal education may hamper the spiritual elevation of most individuals by boxing their thought process into specific ideologies and principles that are already well established. One can achieve true freedom of thought only if he decides to do so. Formal education might play a small role by being a primary exposure to existing knowledge, but the individual must gain knowledge, think and analyze independently to transcend the existing ideas. Informal exploration of knowledge such as reading philosophy, arts, history and, literature play a greater role in mental and spiritual development than formal education.
The necessity of formal education is undeniable in current society. However, one must address its true purpose as a tool to train skilled workers instead of confusing it with spiritual liberation. True pursuit of knowledge sets one free, but it does not come through the structured and constrained process of formal education.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a methodological way" with adverb for "methodological"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he students are indoctrinated and boxed in a methodological way of learning and applying their skills. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ay inspire mental and spiritual freedom to few, but most are trained to be a just ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44712990937 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09358182975 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567975830816 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3564148454 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.058823529 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88235294118 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133140542875 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453504669272 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455841391018 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844710856007 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357667589947 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a methodological way" with adverb for "methodological"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he students are indoctrinated and boxed in a methodological way of learning and applying their skills. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ay inspire mental and spiritual freedom to few, but most are trained to be a just ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44712990937 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09358182975 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567975830816 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3564148454 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.058823529 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88235294118 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133140542875 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453504669272 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455841391018 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844710856007 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357667589947 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.