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Leadership is a focal point in any society, whether a society fail or succeed is a function of the kind of leadership managing its affairs. The crux of everything lies on the shoulder of a leader. The prompt argue that the best way a society can prepare its young people for leadership in any sphere is by instilling a sense of coorperation, not competition. I mostly agree with this positon, and my reasons are embodied in this essay.
Firstly, team work is an essential ingredeint of any functional society. Infact there is almost nothing that can be achieved without team spirit. so, it is important to instill in to young people. for instance, Barack Obama led America succesfully, this was made possible as aresult of the fact that Obama has learnt the importance of coorperation. his administration built and inculcated the spirit of unity- seeing beyonds ones reality and fostering people of different colour, ages andd background. his eightyears tenure transformed and made America. what if America had not shown a spirit of cooperation in to him? perhaps he may have grown to become a diferent leader that will probsbly destroy the country moral and societal fabric.
Furthermore,sense of belonging is no doubt vital in developing leaders. coorperation, no doubt foster and bring people to have a sense of belonging. This is so because cooperation close the social divide among the people. For instance, in a neighbourhood where unity exists, it is possible to feel included and feel loved. inclusiveness and spirit of love are all driven by cooperration which helps to build develop young leaders. It is essential for society to ensure cooperaation so as to be able to raise young leaders to ensure growth and development.
Nonetheless, many will argue that sense of competition tend to make peeple and leaders thrive. However, the aftermath of competitions among young people are usually not palatable, as it breeds envy, resentment and generally create disunity. This consequently raise bad leaders, since every society wants to be preserved, it is therefore essential to instill the sense of cooperation in a bid to raise good leaders within its young populace.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, as to, for instance, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13445378151 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.003023216 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56862745098 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5031075524 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2857142857 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.243740707755 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0831039109588 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150359130593 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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