Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
It is often said that the country is not run by the politicians and the leaders who makes the speeches but rather by the government officials who are working tirelessly behind the scenes. So, it might be very tempting to state that government officials should rely solely on their judgement while making the policies for the whole country rather than unquestionably carrying out the will of the people. According to me, this is an over-simplification of a rather complex topic.
One of the main responsibilities of a government is the welfare of the people they are governing, and it is necessary that the people making the policies should listen to the voices of the people they are trying to make the policies for as it will affect them the most. This will also result in a clearer policy as more points will be covered which might have been overlooked if the policy makers made the laws without consulting the common people.
Some may argue that if the government officials start listening and implementing the will of the people, the policy making process will become really tedious and some people with connections might try to influence the decision-making process. But generally, the people who join the ranks of the government do so by competing with a lot of able candidates and passing through rigorous rounds of interviews. For example, the people joining the top ranks of the Indian bureaucracy are recruited through a common entrance exam known as the UPSC in which the candidates compete with lakhs of people and have rigorous interviews which test their skill as well as their integrity as individuals. Thus, the government officials who are recruited have enough moral character of not being swayed by the influence of some prominent people. Also, it might seem a tedious process to listen to a lot of contradicting views before reaching a conclusion on a policy, but this is still better then making a policy that might benefit only one part of a society while threatening the lives of others.
Thus, government officials should listen to the views of the people and their own judgement to make the policies that is best for the nation instead of relying solely on their judgement or just blindly following the wills of the people.
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- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoni 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ly carrying out the will of the people. According to me, this is an over-simplification of a ra...
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Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...onsulting the common people. Some may argue that if the government officials start ...
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Line 3, column 970, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
...nclusion on a policy, but this is still better then making a policy that might benefit only...
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Line 3, column 977, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...n on a policy, but this is still better then making a policy that might benefit only...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, really, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90052356021 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78762257401 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46335078534 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.5648129532 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.181818182 118.986275619 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.7272727273 23.4991977007 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 5.21951772744 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230566478322 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939495937718 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606241578169 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156885107453 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144181359464 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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