Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline students cannot be motivated by school or college alone

To some extent, I agree with the argument that learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline. However, the arguer extends the opinion into an extreme which cannot be reversed while overlooks the significant role of school in motivating individual learning. On balance, my points of view and deep analysis are as follows.

It is surely reasonable to maintain that individuals are responsible for their own study, given that the demand and lure to learn is inherent in one's own heart. Any external forces are largely useless to empower personal study if the individual does not have the basic curiosity to the word and the fundamental reverence to knowledge. There are tremendous differences in grades between hardworking and indolent students even within the same class, in which the quantity and quality of teachers are homogeneous while personal motivations are totally different, resulting differentiated roles of school.

However, it does not mean that students cannot be motivated by school or college alone. The curiosity and reverence to knowledge can be cultivated by school from dynamic perspective, which is exactly the meaning of education. A sloth individual can acquire the precious personality of assiduousness from the life experience told by teachers. Meanwhile, the horizons of students are limited and require the help from school, thus breaking their bottlenecks and make gradual progress. Students can become adept in disciplines which they are overwhelmed through the imparting from patient teachers.

The combination of personal discipline and motivation by school may be the best way to empower learning and undermine potential obstacles in the way of study, for which the significance of external forces cannot be ignored and discounted. Only recognizing the help from school can individuals study better and become virtuous. Hardworking students may have the risk of being too conceited and losing the motivation to learn more if they cannot realize other's polymath and their own limitations.

In conclusion, it is not reasonable to deny that learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline, while it is also harmful and deleterious to ignore the role of school.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 344.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43895348837 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97156020036 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529069767442 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7746739233 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.733333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9333333333 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429519320032 0.243740707755 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134692893423 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105076939074 0.0758088955206 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235604528005 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630918440494 0.0667264976115 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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