The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement mentions that luxury’s life can prevent individuals to be independent. But I do not agree with the prompt. People can grow up in a very rich families and still be strong because it depends on a person characteristic not just money.
First of all, being rich does not mean that people cannot be strong enough in their lives. Imagine a girl who grows up in a rich family with all expensive clothes and shoes and she goes to a very expensive private school. It does not mean that she is not going to get good grades in school. It exactly can be an opposite because she can just focus on her grades and not be worry about money problem or having a job to pay for her school. She can even have much more high school knowledges compare to a student who goes to a public school because she can ask more question form her teachers.
In addition, conveniences can make every body's life even better and faster. Consider a mother and wife who lives in a big and expensive house with a perfect kitchen and lots of kitchen staffs like different pans, meat chopper, and fruit mixer. Definitely, a woman can cook much easier and faster than a woman who has a very small kitchen with no extra help from modern kitchen instruments.
On the contrary, some people may believe that very comfortable and expensive life can be a distraction for young people to get strong. It can be true in some cases. For example, a girl child who always have everything she wanted may never think that life can be hard sometimes. She may even end up going to parties all times, spending so much money on her clothes, and wasting her time as she grows up. As a result, she may even does not finish her high-school. She may even does not care about having a good job in the future.
As someone grows up as a normal person with ordinary life, he/she may be more independent person compare to someone who has a very comfortable life. But it does not mean that rich people will not be successful in their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...a help from modern kitchen instruments. On the contrary, some people may believe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43051771117 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39226505388 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476839237057 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7498279316 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5789473684 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0855876037367 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388619035469 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466053299964 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0707369575913 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497187491712 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 12.1639044944 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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