The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Luxuries and conveniences does not equate to extravagancy or prodigal lifestyle as it is widely attributed to, rather, it connotes comfortability and the ability to access resources limited to few. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the prompt that luxuries enhance dependency and has no relevance in building strong and motivated individuals because of three reasons.
First and foremost, luxury is pivotal in enhancing comfortability due to the conveniences it renders individuals. An individual who is enjoying conveniences of contemporary life has access to being exposed to various opportunities like trainings and seminars that will foster independency and further enhance a strong personality. A lot of opportunities on capacity building are paid programs which will be readily accessible to such individual and facilitates his development.
More so, an affluent individual will always seek for means of maintain his current stand or better improve it. It is considered a point of duty to enhance their independency in order to further enjoy these conveniences. For instance, Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of Facebook despite enjoying the luxury of life continues to build a stronger portfolio such as WhatsApp and thread which are leading social media platform. Hence, his luxury is a motivating factor to attain more and also provide him with the opportunity to utilize his luxurious life judiciously.
Perhaps, it might be argued that life of convenience and luxury can make an individual lose focus and find no zeal in achieving more, hence being dependent. However, it is important to note this is a reflection of one’s personality and not a result of convenient lifestyle or luxury. Some individuals who barely meets end needs who ought to be motivated to struggle more might as well fall into this case and have no zeal to be in dependent due to their personality of lacking self-motivation. Therefore, it is important to note that living a convenient lifestyle is not a hindrance to personal growth, rather it fosters capacity building and development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...the ability to access resources limited to few. In my opinion, I strongly disagree...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33841463415 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20758223656 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557926829268 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.862289706 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.692307692 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177575983413 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063798163078 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377522288876 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11336849496 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02802342959 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.8420337079 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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