The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
The modern way of life has seen many luxuries and conveniences that previous generations did not have. However, this does not prevent individuals from becoming strong and independent.
Becoming strong or independent is not related to how much luxuries a person had. If it was, then the poor would be strong or independent and the rich would not. Being independent and strong may depend to a small extent on how much hardships he/she had faced. However, the same hardships can also break a person and they could become weak. Likewise, the previous generations had less conveniences and therefore more hardships. But becoming strong depends to a large extent, on how they managed those hardships.
More luxuries can also mean more time to spare. This would in turn, ideally, mean that the spare time could be used for more useful pursuits. If people had less conveniences, they would spend a larger amount of time doing things that does not in any way contribute to the individual becoming stronger or independent. The washing machine has reduced the time needed to wash clothes. In the past people had to wash manually and this does not in any way make the individual stronger.
The social media has reduced the need for letters and we can communicate to people on the other side of the world very quickly. This has eliminated the need for letters and the time, energy/fuel required to deliver letters from one individual to another. This in turn makes us less dependent on people, fuel and conserves time and energy.
To conclude, luxuries and conveniences does not prevent us from becoming strong or independent.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ng or independent is not related to how much luxuries a person had. If it was, then ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ong may depend to a small extent on how much hardships he/she had faced. However, th...
^^^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun conveniences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... Likewise, the previous generations had less conveniences and therefore more hardshi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun conveniences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...for more useful pursuits. If people had less conveniences, they would spend a larger...
^^^^
Line 4, column 18, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
... individual stronger. The social media has reduced the need for letters and we can...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, likewise, may, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 58.6224719101 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 12.9106741573 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 272.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95588235294 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66804386114 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488970588235 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 704.065955056 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5035071686 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.2941176471 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23171144522 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823013486786 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079058376383 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16680144162 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.098279554315 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 100.480337079 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ng or independent is not related to how much luxuries a person had. If it was, then ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ong may depend to a small extent on how much hardships he/she had faced. However, th...
^^^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun conveniences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... Likewise, the previous generations had less conveniences and therefore more hardshi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun conveniences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...for more useful pursuits. If people had less conveniences, they would spend a larger...
^^^^
Line 4, column 18, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
... individual stronger. The social media has reduced the need for letters and we can...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, likewise, may, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 58.6224719101 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 12.9106741573 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 272.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95588235294 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66804386114 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488970588235 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 704.065955056 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5035071686 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.2941176471 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23171144522 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823013486786 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079058376383 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16680144162 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.098279554315 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 100.480337079 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.