A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
Author is suggesting that everyone in a nation should study same national curriculum, this may be helpful in arousing feeling of nationalism in the younger people of the nation but in long term it may have detrimental effects on the overall economic and human growth and development of the nation.
Evolution and innovation happens in a nation when we try to question the existing rules and cultures of the nation. Evolution may be a culture evolution, like in case of India, there was rigid cast system, if from Independence, everyone was taught same national curriculum that we should follow this same caste system and there should difference between a human of lower caste and a human of upper caste, then this system would have continued till now.
But after independence, there was no same national curriculum, each and every region and even people living in a same region had different curriculum, which inspired lot of people from lower caste and also enlightened lot of people from other class to throw away this system and have a system of equality. End result, the old rigid in-human caste system is greatly reduced in India.
Also, this removal of boundaries and equality of every human and not distinction of humans based upon caste system has helped India in terms of economy and also getting rid of superstition. Because of different curriculum, caste system has been greatly reduced and hence lot of people from so called lower caste are entering the main stream economy and hence the work pool is considerably increased which is helping in the economy growth of India. Lower caste people are not now left to do scavengers type jobs, they are entering high profile jobs like engineering, doctors, politics, entrepreneurs etc.
Earlier, people from higher class especially Brahmans, used to control the education system of India. They used to spread superstition to gain monetary benefit from lower class, but this has also been reduced as more and more people are becoming aware of there lies.
Hence, following same curriculum across the nation will have detrimental effect upon the economic and human growth of a nation.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.291989664083 0.238963963785 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.149870801034 0.154291517835 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0956072351421 0.0886310499679 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0516795865633 0.0506014161523 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0129198966408 0.0449626384858 29% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.131782945736 0.123526278965 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0542635658915 0.0379742944744 143% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58939861088 2.82910677849 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.015503875969 0.0316879551592 49% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00258397932817 0.0014075125626 184% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0801033591731 0.0950106342287 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0206718346253 0.0245489744465 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0077519379845 0.0157978311181 49% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2150.0 2899.98275862 74% => OK
No of words: 356.0 478.390804598 74% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0393258427 6.0591788892 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.65681771538 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36797752809 0.369966551584 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23595505618 0.285172536893 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157303370787 0.207245337619 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10393258427 0.136322040163 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58939861088 2.82910677849 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 234.298850575 73% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483146067416 0.492565540709 98% => OK
Word variations: 50.3275248014 56.8184620615 89% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 21.1264367816 52% => OK
Sentence length: 32.3636363636 23.7468607788 136% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.6229599476 62.0618507366 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.454545455 143.81877709 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3636363636 23.7468607788 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.636363636364 0.728815259664 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.87931034483 123% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.71264367816 0% => OK
Readability: 55.9591419816 52.2641144681 107% => OK
Elegance: 2.22891566265 1.64547068916 135% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275765459734 0.39480681544 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.167359215522 0.11556216369 145% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.107497743129 0.0736162880345 146% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.715039082382 0.531340600358 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.218766787457 0.15197228837 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14567249266 0.158818324754 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711311836737 0.0851127212816 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.335367761023 0.388921930462 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.142423080306 0.0677916285025 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192957771641 0.28015025965 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455969981004 0.0610219844235 75% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.8591954023 55% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30459770115 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.96264367816 40% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.10632183908 74% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.93390804598 51% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.04597701149 33% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 15.0862068966 60% => OK
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 3.5 Out of 6
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