Education is the backbone for a healthy society and a prosperous future of any nation. The quality and standard of a nation's education system is a huge determining factor of the nation's tomorrow. Building a strong nation involves wholehearted contribution of people from all walks of life, doctors, engineers, pilots, political leaders, teachers, scientists, army-men, policemen, and so on. Poets, comedians, story-writers, actors and all other artists also have their own part to play in a country's holistic development. Adopting the recommendation for a uniform national curriculum until college would mean imposing the young minds with a lot many things when they should be utilizing their time in nurturing their talent in the field they wish to build their careers in.
A uniform national curriculum for all students until they enter college would mean irrespective of their individual interests and aspirations, they will be required to devote equal time and energy to all the subjects. At the time when they could be enhancing their knowledge and skills in the field of their interest, their precious time will be lost in managing balance between so many subjects of little relevance with their future dreams and ambitions.
For example, a student who aspires to become a doctor and serve the mankind would want to build a strong foundation in the related subject during his high-school. Forcing this young mind to devote time to learning the nuances of English literature or History or any other subject for that matter would not be helpful for anyone. Similarly, if a child who has a very bright and vivid vision and is exceptionally talented in writing poems is forced to study the complex structure of human body, he won't be able to do justice to either of these subjects.
Though a basic knowledge of all the things around us is of great importance, but making it mandatory until college is a bit extreme and also unjust for the students. The students should be taught all subjects equally until intermediate level and then be allowed to choose for themselves whichever field they wish to pursue their careers in.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...y nation. The quality and standard of a nations education system is a huge determining ...
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Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his high-school. Forcing this young mind to devote time to learning the nuances o...
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Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding things'?
Suggestion: the surrounding things
...cts. Though a basic knowledge of all the things around us is of great importance, but making it m...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l intermediate level and then be allowed to choose for themselves whichever field...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, similarly, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08262108262 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77667155999 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558404558405 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.925893508 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.666666667 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249415606159 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978558868277 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942301543096 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149630252279 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768367426443 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.