Nationalized curriculum until college
An important role of any nation is to ensure the education of its populous. Each nation must determine the best way to prepare its citizens for the demands of adult life. Ideally, education will not only provide the foundation for students to become employable but ensure they become well rounded people. Some nations try to accomplish this by requiring students to study a national curriculum until college. While this plan has benefits, it also has some drawbacks. By understanding these a better plan to educate citizenary can be devised.
A national curriculum has the benefit of ensuring all students entering college have the same base of knowledge. This eases some of the pressure on professors by allowing them to assume certian level of knowledge within the class. It may also ensure a more equatiable system. Students from lower socio-economic backgrounds will have a more even playing field and may relieve some burden by entering college knowing their peers have had the same curriculum. A national curriculum, when well executed, can ensure that all students have basic understanding of all topics and have skills neccessary for being a competent adult (preparing taxes, cooking, personal finance etc.). The benefits of a nationalized curriculum up until college is that all students can be prepared to a base level for adult life and that students from less advantageous ciricumstances have more of an equal chance.
The drawbacks to a national curriculum come from forcing everyone into one box. While it is important to expose students to a wide variety of topics, a national curriculum will not be able to prepare everyone for the type of work they will end up doing. Not every student has the same natural talents or passions and a nation needs people with all sorts of skills. Some students excel in cognitive task, others manual, others creative. A national curriculum will not serve all of these students equally or if it does may not truly ready any of them for the demands of their future careers.
In my opinion, the best system would be one that starts as a national curriculum as students enter formalized schooling. This would allow all students to learn the necessary fundmentals. As students age more specialization is allowed so that students who shine in different areas can focus in and hone those skills. In this type of system all students can reach a certian base of knowledge but also have the freedom to discover and develop skills for their professions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, well, while, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04337349398 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75198868433 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489156626506 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.9141806513 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6666666667 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38095238095 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286064627503 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971234536413 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110532556899 0.0758088955206 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182176574655 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743944704955 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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